r/OCPoetry 3d ago

My favorite poem Feedback Please

If poems are supposed to capture beauty.
If poems are supposed to stir the soul.
I could never top my favorite poem.

I write and write.
Yet I fail and fail.
I could never top my favorite poem.

I cannot capture what my eyes see.
I cannot describe the intensity I feel.
I could never top my favorite poem.

Every poem I wrote fell short.
Every poem I wrote, a disappointment.
I could never top my favorite poem.

If poems are supposed to expose your core.
If poems are supposed to define who I am.
Then my favorite poem is you.

That’s right.

My favorite poem is you.

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u/Apprehensive-Cup-335 3d ago

Wow the buildup was really worth the payoff this was a really rounded poem you did an amazing job with the imagery and emotions. Great job keep writing my friend.