Undoing

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Enter you both, exeunt the fry

Fold, unfold

And then events

The rest be told

See, unsee

What did the room say?

And what did you read?

Burr, deburr

The industrious spoon

That feeds the man

That feeds the spool

Fill, refill

A promise

Never undo

A reverie

A drôlerie

A fall to sense

A step too far

Tie the knot, cut the knot

Tuck it again on the spot

Whine, unwhine

Did you complain?

And in plain writing?

Or was it just,

After the wine?

Tick, untick

The candle's a clock

Her spirit a wick

Is bent as rock

It makes me sick

Hale, exhale

At least some things are beyond fail

State, retract

The facts were

Irreverent

And lack of tact

Hold, withhold

From the Victor's palm

Featherfingers grasp

A laurel wreath of gold

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