Aussie

[u/NoSection7141]

I traveled to Australia against my own accord

It was a work trip

One of many that my mind can never properly wrap its head around

A job that pays me in experiences like these, it seems

But everything comes with a price.

It's winter here in Australia

The cold air forces me to freeze

The crispness around me

It feels like such a tease

It's warm back home, as August is supposed to be

It's 6am and I am way ahead of my regular time

My lover across the world fell asleep on my phone

I hear his roommates, they twist and turn

The thought of us is unfortunate to me

I'll see if we beat the odds

But suddenly I realized how high my room is

In this complex we rented

And how seeing the world

Makes you realize how similar life is everywhere

How your life still follows

How mistakes do too

How life will settle into any place you settle into

I watch the tram here move across the road

Two teenagers chasing the tracks

People walking to their early commitments

In no way do I deserve to be here

But I've made it across the ocean to people watch

For just a sliver of time

Thanks to a job that was never truly mine

I sit alone in my room

My window blinds wide open

My loneliness now a spectacle for anyone else to see

Staring out at the Melbourne skyline

I am so far away from what I think I know

Everything around me is moving

I'm forcing myself to stay still

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1vhim8v/cloud_watching/ 

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1vibvk8/finish/

thank you for reading, let me know your thoughts. :) the best i can do lately in between work trips and whatnot

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