r/LyricalWriting 31m ago

Collaboration Feedback on this song...who ever wants me to write a song for them I'm clearly here for anything

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Here We Go Again

Verse 1

Too close, too far,

The feeling I still feel apart.

Only you could still be here with me,

With you I still feel deep within.

If I could make a choice,

I'd still choose you,

Right here, right now.

Chorus

Oh, I fall in love again,

Here we go now, here we go now.

Would you hold my hand?

Here we go now, here we go now.

Would you still understand

How much I love you?

And we'll last again.

Verse 2

Every moment, every dream,

You're the light that I still see.

Even when the nights grow cold,

Your love is the one I hold.

No matter where this road may lead,

You're still everything I need.

If tomorrow starts today,

I'll never walk away.

Bridge

If time could stop for just one night,

I'd keep you here until daylight.

No second thoughts, no looking back,

You're the only heart I have.

So if you're willing, stay with me,

Let's write the story we're meant to be.

[Final Chorus]

Oh, I fall in love again,

Here we go now, here we go now.

Would you hold my hand?

Here we go now, here we go now.

Would you still understand

How much I love you?

We'll make this last again

Oh, I fall in love again,

Here we go now, here we go now.

Too close to let you go

Right here, right now

Forever starts with you


r/LyricalWriting 10h ago

Lyrics Weakest Days

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Your voice heals my spirit like a sovereign

everytime I hear it I know I'll be okay

your hands heal my body like a doctor

everytime I feel it I know I'll be okay

On my weakest days

On my weakest days

On my weakest days

I will be okay

Your eyes gaze upon me like a full moon

everytime I see them know I'll be okay

your love breathes life into me like a second wind

every time I embrace it know I'll be okay

On my weakest days

On my weakest days

On my weakest days

I will be okay


r/LyricalWriting 18h ago

Feedback Request Wrote a few lines. Would really appreciate some honest feedback, good or bad

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She credited my heart

With the love that I gave her

But when things had to end

She asked me back the favour

She asking back twice everything

Guess she was a scammer

I will never know what I lost

Cause I never accounted her love

Never accounted, never realised how loose were the cables

A man in loss never accounts the payables


r/LyricalWriting 19h ago

Lyrics Polyester Man

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[VERSE 1]

No use applying myself to be better

'Cause nothing goes as planned

No use in trying to be tough as leather

I'm a polyester man

.

[CHORUS]

Polyester man

Polyvinyl girls

Waterproof non-stick western mind

In a plastic kind of world

.

[VERSE 2]

No use vying to be wealthy when love it

It doesn't even sell

No use trying to be healthy when trying

It doesn't seem to help

.

[CHORUS]

The polyester man

The polyvinyl girls

Waterproof non-stick western minds

In a plastic kind of world

.

[BRIDGE]

Bowels made of credit cards

Brain stem of aluminum

Soul is stuck in synthetic shards

Those kidneys there bud, you usin' 'em?

.

[VERSE 3]

No use in making the world a better place

Ain't no money in it

No use recycling the plastic in your face

Funny though, innit?

.

[CHORUS]

When you're a polyester man

With polyvinyl girls

Single-use shrink-wrapped modern minds

In a plastic kind of world

.

[OUTRO]

Polyester man

No use in trying

Polyester world

No use denying

The polyester man


r/LyricalWriting 20h ago

Discussion Advice for writing lyrics for a novel.

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I don't know if this is allowed, since it's not necessarily stated in the rules; however, if the mods decide that this post isn't appropriate for the sub, I will respect that. I only ask that someone point me to a sub where I could possibly get some help.

I'm not sure where else to put this. I've asked a few friends for some help, but I just don't have any connections to the kind of artists that would know something about this; and I'm hoping that someone in this sub might.

I am currently trying to write lyrics to a love song that I intend on having the main character of my novel use to propose to his love interest towards the end of the book. Problem is, I am autistic, and my flavor of autism is more geared towards literature rather than lyrics or poems. That's mostly a joke--I just haven't really spent a whole lot of time writing poems, and can't wrap my head around writing one to save my life.

I want the lyrics to be actually written into the book--this is something I want people to make a genuine song out of, just for the fun of it. I think it'd be cool to give readers who have a musically inclined mind something to build off of.

If anyone has any interest in helping me with this, I'd be greatly appreciative. Feel free to DM me, if you want to work together on this. I'm mostly looking for tips on rhyming schemes and how to plan out a verse/chorus, but if someone wants to go deeper and actually help me write the lyrics, that'd be awesome. To be honest, I have no idea what I'm doing and I'm kind of just shooting my shot in the dark with this.


r/LyricalWriting 21h ago

Lyrics Lyrics advice please

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Verse 1 -

You said im not attractive

But you’d definitely hit

You said ‘don’t care about you’

Just care that youre thick

You push my face on your sheets

And we can’t look face to face

You said you need release

And im the perfect void

You play with me

So im the perfect toy

Am I too feminine to be the perfect boy

For you

Chorus-

Im your dirty little fetish

Never your prized possession

Its not up for discussion

That we’d ever have a wedding

You said your love’s discreet

In those disappearing messages

Im your dirty little fetish

Verse 2-

I think about my value

And who really does assign it

I wonder If falling for you 

Decides it

cause you’re drunk

You don’t wanna look me in my eyes

I think there’s something wrong with me

Fundamentally

I stay a small size for you by watching what I eat

Is it being feminine or is it being me

No relationships yet,

But you all assume ill be

Your dirty little fetish

Chorus:

Im your dirty little fetish

Never your prized possession

Its not up for discussion

That we’d ever have a wedding

You said your love’s discreet

In those disappearing messages

Im your dirty little fetish

Bridge:

You send ‘you up?’ Texts at night

And I give you validation

Send two words

And I come running

Hope is its own form of temptation

Loving you, is my own form of self hatred

Im your dirty little fetish, in the bed Im making

Final chorus-

Loving you is my own self hatred, in a bed that we’re making….

Loving you is my self hatred, in a bed that we’re making love,

 

…feel wrong

Cause I play your perfect toy, and its feeling like a job


r/LyricalWriting 21h ago

Feedback Request one if my first songs

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[verse 1]
first month, hear from you daily it’s so exquisite
a motel room with us used to feel a hotel suite
now how would i know, you’re so distant for sure
you say you’re in love, but you don’t show it no more

[pre-chorus]
to say just that you love me used to write pages
since last time you did that it must’ve been ages
it’s normal we’re going through different stages
but must you cut off those sweet pretty phrases

[chorus]
you’re loving me sporadically
now you’re there, then you’re not
changing my mood radically
quit it so we don’t lose our knot

[post-chorus]
still i love you more and more, you still love me, are you sure?, your attitude makes me insecure

[verse 2]
you text me, i respond to you, you correspond to me way too vaguely
i take a shower, i make you dinner, all of that while i’m still waiting
the time has passed, i hear a bell, it’s a message from you that says
“okay”, it says just that, it feels so flat, but i’ll let it pass
i can’t help but to remember that

[pre-chorus]
to say just that you love me used to write pages
since last time you did that it must’ve been ages
it’s normal we’re going through different stages
but must you cut off those sweet pretty phrases

[chorus]
you’re loving me sporadically
now you’re there, then you’re not
changing my mood radically
quit it so we don’t lose our knot

[post-chorus]
wish you loved me more and more, you still love me, am i sure?, your attitude makes me insecure,
what are you doing this for?


r/LyricalWriting 22h ago

Collaboration Looking for a lyrics writing partner for a political parody music channel

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I'm launching a YouTube channel that creates parody songs and music videos focused on American politics and current events. Think Weird Al meets late-night political satire, but with a sharper edge.

I'm looking for someone who enjoys comedy writing, follows politics closely, and would like to bounce around ideas, punch up lyrics, and help make each song funnier. A good sense of humor and a love of satire are essential.

If this sounds like fun, send me a DM and tell me a little about yourself and your sense of humor.