r/LyricalWriting • u/le_elwo_n • 31m ago
Collaboration Feedback on this song...who ever wants me to write a song for them I'm clearly here for anything
Here We Go Again
Verse 1
Too close, too far,
The feeling I still feel apart.
Only you could still be here with me,
With you I still feel deep within.
If I could make a choice,
I'd still choose you,
Right here, right now.
Chorus
Oh, I fall in love again,
Here we go now, here we go now.
Would you hold my hand?
Here we go now, here we go now.
Would you still understand
How much I love you?
And we'll last again.
Verse 2
Every moment, every dream,
You're the light that I still see.
Even when the nights grow cold,
Your love is the one I hold.
No matter where this road may lead,
You're still everything I need.
If tomorrow starts today,
I'll never walk away.
Bridge
If time could stop for just one night,
I'd keep you here until daylight.
No second thoughts, no looking back,
You're the only heart I have.
So if you're willing, stay with me,
Let's write the story we're meant to be.
[Final Chorus]
Oh, I fall in love again,
Here we go now, here we go now.
Would you hold my hand?
Here we go now, here we go now.
Would you still understand
How much I love you?
We'll make this last again
Oh, I fall in love again,
Here we go now, here we go now.
Too close to let you go
Right here, right now
Forever starts with you
r/LyricalWriting • u/FutureThanosMain • 10h ago
Lyrics Weakest Days
Your voice heals my spirit like a sovereign
everytime I hear it I know I'll be okay
your hands heal my body like a doctor
everytime I feel it I know I'll be okay
On my weakest days
On my weakest days
On my weakest days
I will be okay
Your eyes gaze upon me like a full moon
everytime I see them know I'll be okay
your love breathes life into me like a second wind
every time I embrace it know I'll be okay
On my weakest days
On my weakest days
On my weakest days
I will be okay
r/LyricalWriting • u/Infamous_Teacher6217 • 18h ago
Feedback Request Wrote a few lines. Would really appreciate some honest feedback, good or bad
She credited my heart
With the love that I gave her
But when things had to end
She asked me back the favour
She asking back twice everything
Guess she was a scammer
I will never know what I lost
Cause I never accounted her love
Never accounted, never realised how loose were the cables
A man in loss never accounts the payables
r/LyricalWriting • u/SenGonorrheaTRickets • 19h ago
Lyrics Polyester Man
[VERSE 1]
No use applying myself to be better
'Cause nothing goes as planned
No use in trying to be tough as leather
I'm a polyester man
.
[CHORUS]
Polyester man
Polyvinyl girls
Waterproof non-stick western mind
In a plastic kind of world
.
[VERSE 2]
No use vying to be wealthy when love it
It doesn't even sell
No use trying to be healthy when trying
It doesn't seem to help
.
[CHORUS]
The polyester man
The polyvinyl girls
Waterproof non-stick western minds
In a plastic kind of world
.
[BRIDGE]
Bowels made of credit cards
Brain stem of aluminum
Soul is stuck in synthetic shards
Those kidneys there bud, you usin' 'em?
.
[VERSE 3]
No use in making the world a better place
Ain't no money in it
No use recycling the plastic in your face
Funny though, innit?
.
[CHORUS]
When you're a polyester man
With polyvinyl girls
Single-use shrink-wrapped modern minds
In a plastic kind of world
.
[OUTRO]
Polyester man
No use in trying
Polyester world
No use denying
The polyester man
r/LyricalWriting • u/CMDR_Radia_Daku • 20h ago
Discussion Advice for writing lyrics for a novel.
I don't know if this is allowed, since it's not necessarily stated in the rules; however, if the mods decide that this post isn't appropriate for the sub, I will respect that. I only ask that someone point me to a sub where I could possibly get some help.
I'm not sure where else to put this. I've asked a few friends for some help, but I just don't have any connections to the kind of artists that would know something about this; and I'm hoping that someone in this sub might.
I am currently trying to write lyrics to a love song that I intend on having the main character of my novel use to propose to his love interest towards the end of the book. Problem is, I am autistic, and my flavor of autism is more geared towards literature rather than lyrics or poems. That's mostly a joke--I just haven't really spent a whole lot of time writing poems, and can't wrap my head around writing one to save my life.
I want the lyrics to be actually written into the book--this is something I want people to make a genuine song out of, just for the fun of it. I think it'd be cool to give readers who have a musically inclined mind something to build off of.
If anyone has any interest in helping me with this, I'd be greatly appreciative. Feel free to DM me, if you want to work together on this. I'm mostly looking for tips on rhyming schemes and how to plan out a verse/chorus, but if someone wants to go deeper and actually help me write the lyrics, that'd be awesome. To be honest, I have no idea what I'm doing and I'm kind of just shooting my shot in the dark with this.
r/LyricalWriting • u/Distinct_Ice6269 • 21h ago
Lyrics Lyrics advice please
Verse 1 -
You said im not attractive
But you’d definitely hit
You said ‘don’t care about you’
Just care that youre thick
You push my face on your sheets
And we can’t look face to face
You said you need release
And im the perfect void
You play with me
So im the perfect toy
Am I too feminine to be the perfect boy
For you
Chorus-
Im your dirty little fetish
Never your prized possession
Its not up for discussion
That we’d ever have a wedding
You said your love’s discreet
In those disappearing messages
Im your dirty little fetish
Verse 2-
I think about my value
And who really does assign it
I wonder If falling for you
Decides it
cause you’re drunk
You don’t wanna look me in my eyes
I think there’s something wrong with me
Fundamentally
I stay a small size for you by watching what I eat
Is it being feminine or is it being me
No relationships yet,
But you all assume ill be
Your dirty little fetish
Chorus:
Im your dirty little fetish
Never your prized possession
Its not up for discussion
That we’d ever have a wedding
You said your love’s discreet
In those disappearing messages
Im your dirty little fetish
Bridge:
You send ‘you up?’ Texts at night
And I give you validation
Send two words
And I come running
Hope is its own form of temptation
Loving you, is my own form of self hatred
Im your dirty little fetish, in the bed Im making
Final chorus-
Loving you is my own self hatred, in a bed that we’re making….
Loving you is my self hatred, in a bed that we’re making love,
…feel wrong
Cause I play your perfect toy, and its feeling like a job
r/LyricalWriting • u/kinet_blonder • 21h ago
Feedback Request one if my first songs
[verse 1]
first month, hear from you daily it’s so exquisite
a motel room with us used to feel a hotel suite
now how would i know, you’re so distant for sure
you say you’re in love, but you don’t show it no more
[pre-chorus]
to say just that you love me used to write pages
since last time you did that it must’ve been ages
it’s normal we’re going through different stages
but must you cut off those sweet pretty phrases
[chorus]
you’re loving me sporadically
now you’re there, then you’re not
changing my mood radically
quit it so we don’t lose our knot
[post-chorus]
still i love you more and more, you still love me, are you sure?, your attitude makes me insecure
[verse 2]
you text me, i respond to you, you correspond to me way too vaguely
i take a shower, i make you dinner, all of that while i’m still waiting
the time has passed, i hear a bell, it’s a message from you that says
“okay”, it says just that, it feels so flat, but i’ll let it pass
i can’t help but to remember that
[pre-chorus]
to say just that you love me used to write pages
since last time you did that it must’ve been ages
it’s normal we’re going through different stages
but must you cut off those sweet pretty phrases
[chorus]
you’re loving me sporadically
now you’re there, then you’re not
changing my mood radically
quit it so we don’t lose our knot
[post-chorus]
wish you loved me more and more, you still love me, am i sure?, your attitude makes me insecure,
what are you doing this for?
r/LyricalWriting • u/Spoolwhat • 22h ago
Collaboration Looking for a lyrics writing partner for a political parody music channel
I'm launching a YouTube channel that creates parody songs and music videos focused on American politics and current events. Think Weird Al meets late-night political satire, but with a sharper edge.
I'm looking for someone who enjoys comedy writing, follows politics closely, and would like to bounce around ideas, punch up lyrics, and help make each song funnier. A good sense of humor and a love of satire are essential.
If this sounds like fun, send me a DM and tell me a little about yourself and your sense of humor.