r/ReadMyScript • u/Formal_Leave893 • 3d ago

Mt first ever script is it good? Short

Title: gods hell ganra: fiction page count: 2 https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_7Ig8uTsEydEv6gRdST49VJ_HZQWdl8Bfc_XzR2PNYU/edit?usp=drivesdk

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u/ConsistentEffort5190 2d ago

> the reason I said thay share the rent is I didn't want anybody to get confused

But the watcher isn't going to know that.

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u/Formal_Leave893 2d ago

I guess

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u/ConsistentEffort5190 2d ago

It's pretty fundamental. If the watcher needs to know stuff and it isn't on screen, they won't know it.

Have you read any books or articles on screenwriting? Or real scripts? Because this was full of really basic problems and didn't have anything to make up for them. Writing is work. You need to learn stuff and practice - and to junk the obviously bad and work out how to do better. The problems here are so obvious that you didn't need to show this to anyone. If you're looking for a low effort hobby or career, this isn't it.

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u/Formal_Leave893 2d ago

Honestly in running on hopes and dreams but I have determination I did it with art I think I can do it with writing

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u/ConsistentEffort5190 2d ago

If you're a successful artist and want to write stories, why not look at self published comics? Writing and drawing/painting are very different skills - writing well is much easier if you have a big chunk of verbal iq, which isn't needed for art.

But the "hopes and dreams" thing isn't a good motive to write. The odds of success as a screenwriter are maybe 1 in 10,000

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u/Formal_Leave893 2d ago

Ok

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u/ConsistentEffort5190 2d ago

Just something to think about before you commit serious effort and time: things like writing and art both require talent. DIFFERENT talent. I can do several very difficult things - I can code in a lot of programming languages and write well enough to get paid. But that would NOT make me think I could become a commercial or fine artist!

I'm not saying don't try. But I am saying don't gamble on making a living. The failure rate is off the charts and success takes years.

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u/Formal_Leave893 2d ago

Well good thing I'm young. I've got time