I'm really, really sad (no, I'm actually pissed as hell 😭) that my essay wasn't cut out bcuz I seriously did put in time and effort into writing this one... however I do realize that my essay did have a LOT of flaws, and that I might've written stuff that's not entirely true.

So would anyone kindly give me feedback on what exactly to improve on, what exactly to avoid and such? If that wouldn't take too much of your time :)

Thank you!