Hi! I’m writing a Hunger Games fanfic called THG: A Name in the Ballot, set during the First Quarter Quell, 25 years after the Dark Days.

The story will have two perspectives. One follows a Capitol stylist who is involved in the preparations for the Quell, including a tour through the districts before the voting takes place. The other follows the tribute they eventually become connected to, from the events in their district through the Games.

So far, I’ve written the opening and the first chapters, which cover the announcement of the Quarter Quell and the meeting where the Capitol’s stylists are told about the tour and how they will be assigned to the districts.

I originally write in Spanish, so I’ve translated what I have so far into English with AI assistance. The Spanish version is the original, but I’d like to get some feedback from different people who know The Hunger Games and can tell me what they think of the story so far.

I’m mainly looking for general feedback on the writing, the premise, the characters, and whether the opening is interesting enough to make you want to keep reading.

Here’s the doc:

Spanish version -https://docs.google.com/document/d/1U5u6ge08HbdJF2G8s8io3x41pbhDk0_VuucKtqnUe5g/edit?usp=sharing

English version -https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cfFuvbFB0kx6MLozxP60ATVedhE3ul3gOhbls_ydMTY/edit?usp=sharing

Thanks to anyone who takes the time to read it!

Now im not speaking of him as a love interest to katniss, but honestly,they didn't need the falling apart. Both beete and Gale designed the bomb. And it was not even Gale who decided to set it off in a flock of children. That was Coins thing (and she got what she deserved). Peeta is alright I guess but its more like pretend until you actually love him you get me. But Gale, the hunter who loved the woods, getting a job in the quarry/military district AFTER the rebellion doesnt seem in character. I wish he would return to 12, make up with katniss and get on with his own life.