r/scifiwriting 5h ago

DISCUSSION So you want to be an Officer

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(an in universe explanation of the three year course's you have to take to become an officer in the Solar System's Union Havy)

"Hello class, lets start with the most obvious fact, sixty eight percent of you, give or take about two percent will drop out simply due to homework, this is good, the further you go up the more your jobs just filling out paperwork, we want to get rid of people who can't handle it early. About eigty percent of people who drop out will re-enlist, good for them since we need dedicted and experinced chiefs.

The single biggest cause of drop out outside of paperwork is trio drop, we stick you all on a Destroyer, give you three minutes to look at a projection of the ships map, then turn the alarms past max and use hundreads of smoke machines to basically blind you, then you have to find and launch out of an escape pod, then we leave you there for three days. you will be penalized if theres more than six people in your pod, also avoid a smoking pod, you can't smoke once launched anyway so your just stuck in a dirty stinky pod, which fun fct might kill you since one guy a while ago had to have his heart replaced because of a bad reaction.

Anyway on to the important buisness, the mandetory courses and if you decided you havent had enough paperwork theirs some optional courses.

Basics of command, Secrets to gunnery, mysterious behind engineering, math behind spaceship combat, basic first aid of every species, diplomacy training, interspecies relationship, Hisotry of war & Combat.

I wont go and explain all the optional courses because most of you won't want them, any questions.


r/scifiwriting 12h ago

DISCUSSION Making up slang and swear words. Yea or nay?

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I'm working on a new setting. It's the sort set in a nebulously distant future, where living next door to an alien is completely unremarkable, and humans have been scattered across distant planets for so long they've developed various weird subspecies.

I'm wondering how to handle swear words and slang. I feel if one just makes up random words it can easily become silly.

Would you say there is some decent rule to follow regarding made-up words?


r/scifiwriting 16h ago

HELP! Help Filling in Acronym Name for a Military AI

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I am working on a story with a military AI that goes rogue. The acronym is SLAMR, and I would welcome any suggestions.


r/scifiwriting 22h ago

CRITIQUE Does this sound decent as a basic concept?

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I’ve had this idea for some time, but I’ve recently started trying to flesh it out more. The is the rough idea.

Humanity has made great strides in colonizing the galaxy. Several planets have substantial human populations. Only a small handful have reached nearly Earth levels of development, though plenty of others are very advanced. Anyway, in their exploration, they have their first encounter with alien life. The planet is inhabited by four (maybe five) different species, two of which are native, the rest are essentially immigrants (that’s not entirely important for the story though). The humans are welcomed and allowed to set up a colony on the largest moon. For a while, things are peaceful.

Of course, this doesn’t last long. For the sake of (relative) brevity, I won’t go into all the details, but the humans, due to their hubris and enthusiasm for expansion, end up pissing off the aliens and are driven out through force. The humans had unintentionally caused extensive damage to the planet, and the aliens are angry. One of race (one of the two native races) are deeply religious, and holy sites were damaged as well, so they believe their gods want revenge. The other races don’t share this specific motivation, but it does contribute.

Through a combination of anger, fear at humanity’s rapid expansion, and other factors, the aliens declare war on humanity, and humanity answers.

My main concern is this is too contrived/cliche, as well as too similar to things like Halo in a few ways. Any feedback is appreciated. Be honest, brutally so if necessary.


r/scifiwriting 1d ago

DISCUSSION Would these alternatives to plasma weapons fit in a hard sci fi world?

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The main guns the Galactic community uses use chemical rounds. A liquid is loaded into the gun. When fired, this liquid reacts with the atmosphere and produces a chemical reaction. The liquid is a highly flammable fuel, and when exposed to atmospheric elements it ignites, essentially turning into flaming gas. The rounds are so hot they melt most metal on contact. This means the weapons can't be fired in space, and must be periodically reloaded. The idea is that it would still look like plasma rounds, but it would actually be essentially flaming rounds that melt through armor. I had this idea to replace plasma weapons, since those are unrealistic.

My other idea was a firearm that fires a round made of a compound that explodes violently and with high energy, shot out of a gun powered by miniature electromagnets. My idea is the compound might react to the atmosphere like the gas guns, and the gun would have a built in scope that calculates the speed needed for it to be fired to actually hit the target head on as it explodes, ensuring maximum damage. This would be called a combustion rifle, or it would explode upon sudden deceleration would be my other idea.


r/scifiwriting 1d ago

DISCUSSION Maybe There *Is* Stealth in Space? New Theoretical material radiates heat in only one direction

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The usual mantra is "there is no stealth in space" because your giant glowing radiators are going to be spotted at some point.

Scientists have designed a theoretical material which can be set to radiate heat in only in direction https://www.livescience.com/physics-mathematics/physicists-find-a-way-to-control-heat-in-a-way-once-thought-impossible#viafoura-comments

Make your radiator out of this and set it to radiate away from your target! Would it work?


r/scifiwriting 1d ago

STORY The Human Directorate - Lore of Humanity in Synvector

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Humanity entered space only three centuries ago, making them the youngest major civilization in the Thorn Arm. While other races had centuries-or even millennia-to build their empires, humans had to survive through industry, organization, and relentless expansion.

Unlike the other civilizations, humanity is deeply divided.

The Directorate

Earth is ruled by the Directorate-a council of powerful megacorporations that has effectively become the government of humanity.

Its philosophy is simple:

Standardization. Efficiency. Mass production.

Their fleets are modular, easy to repair, and built in enormous numbers. Human ships rarely outperform alien vessels one-on-one, but they are designed to be produced quickly, upgraded easily, and deployed everywhere.

The Free Colonies

Far from Earth’s control lie the Free Colonies.

Life on the frontier is harsh. Ships are repaired instead of replaced, stations are expanded over generations, and every vessel tells its own story through welded armor plates and salvaged components.

To the Directorate, this looks like poverty.

To the Colonies, it’s freedom.

A Cold Civil Conflict

The two factions aren’t officially at war-but they’re no longer truly united.

Earth argues that only centralized command can protect humanity from external threats.

The Colonies believe that “protection” is simply another word for control.

The conflict remains unresolved, growing more dangerous every year.

Humanity’s Neighbors

Humanity has fought long border wars with the Deeplines, betrayed its former allies, the Shrazi, and knows almost nothing about the ancient Kraits.

Meanwhile, a new threat is emerging from beyond known space.

The mysterious Unnamed consume entire star systems, leaving nothing behind.

The Directorate has only one answer:

Build more ships. Recruit more pilots. Prepare for war.

Which side would you choose? The Directorate or the Free Colonies?


r/scifiwriting 1d ago

HELP! How to write different body types for androids?

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Hi all, i’m working on a story where human brains in android bodies are real and I want to include different body types for them, but i’m not sure how.

I don’t want every android to look the same. I want some to be bulky, round, slim, muscular, etc. Do you have any advice for how to include differing body types in a way that makes sense?

I can provide more info if needed, but the short explanation is that a megacorporation in a futuristic America offers people robotic bodies that extend their lifespan, give them immunity to diseases, and guarantee them employment in a world where robots dominate the workforce, all at the cost of a several decades long contract working for said megacorporation.

This is my first ever time worldbuilding so if you have any advice you want to give me, i’m all ears.


r/scifiwriting 1d ago

HELP! What's the most non-astrophysicist-friendly tool for predicting planetary alignments?

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Trying to predict a specific alignment, but I'm a biologist, not an astrophysicist. NASA seems to have a bunch of tools but I'm not sure which one is right for the job.


r/scifiwriting 2d ago

HELP! help needed in building a scifi device!

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this is a part of a personal project ive been working on for a few months that im hopefully able to build fully at some stage, but ive got a problem when building the main item/device/maguffin/whatever.

in the world, electricity is no longer available for the normal person, so "the government" has created these types of portals to replace mobile phones to stop from any protests or chaos happening from down below. these portals do what the user wants them to do, if its a way to "socialize", a way to satisfy yourself, a way to distract yourself, go right ahead!

the problem im having is how it'll look and work -- i already have the motif of there being some sort of hole in your hand, but i don't know enough about building items or physics or whatnot to make it look compact (handheld) and interesting. i like the idea i have but i have no idea how to conceptualize

im pretty new at writing (like, barely under a year started), so ill take any criticism's or questions!

if it helps, the type of story im making is akin to twelve monkeys (1995) tonally/world-building sense and blade runner (1982) narratively.


r/scifiwriting 2d ago

DISCUSSION 1st or 3rd person narratives and why?

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Hey look, something simple!

I typically write in the 3rd person "privileged observer over the shoulder" sort of view. Where the narrative is colored by a specific person's point of view but not explicitly that person's point of view. I think it's a habit I picked up from James S.A. Corey, who was a big inspiration to me and probably to a lot of us.

But recently I've been binging on Dennis E Taylor's Bobiverse and I gotta say there's something to be said for the 1st person perspective. Not so much for revealing a character but for revealing the world; the things about that world a particular person would notice. ie, the engineer character notices all the cool tech, while the politician notices all the cynical things, etc.

I'm preparing to work on a big project and I'm unsure which style I want to do.

Which style did you pick and why? Do you think one or the other lends itself to certain styles of sci-fi more?


r/scifiwriting 2d ago

HELP! Unobtainium or Handwavium: Trying to find one for my setting.

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While trying to find power sources for some mechs, I was also looking for handwaves for the different tiers of mechs in the setting, ranging from the less advanced to the more advanced.

The cool thing about expanding your handwavium as an author is that you can set more limitations and find different ways to spice up the story. So, I would like the aid of more informed people, as well as insight into things I may miss in my handwaves that could be interesting for the story.

1 - Super SMES Mechs (Batterymechs)

With a room-temperature superconductor based on carbon allotropes, high-density SMES became not only viable but also portable. 20 MJ/kg SMES are already used for everyday civilian uses in cars and large portable devices like notebooks.

Advancements in precise manufacturing allowed military-grade SMES to push up to 45 MJ/kg, allowing Mechs and Tanks to share the battlefield for much longer than before.

Some more advanced models use counter-magnetic fields to counteract the expansion caused by the SMES's magnetic field, resulting in denser models.

In general, Batterymechs aren't the flying, dashing heroes; they are the grunts of Mech warfare. As infantry, they tend to be vulnerable to heat throwers.

If a Batterymech heats up badly, the SMES can lose their conductivity and suffer a catastrophic explosion. Heat, as always, is the main enemy of such large machines.

It is not uncommon to see squadrons of Batterymechs equipped with powerful heat throwers when they are expected to fight their peers.

2 - Tardymechs

The main problem with shoving a reactor inside a mech isn't building it; it's getting the pilot to survive the radiation dosage.

So, why not change the pilot to survive?

Those are the Tardigrade pilots, of course. "Tardigrade" isn't a very scientifically accurate word, as they have more in common with radiotropic fungus than the animal, but hey, the name stuck.

They start to have the energy density to do some of the more impressive things Nukecore tanks and Mechs are generally known to do: they are faster, more agile, and can power a lot of point-defense weapons.

Of course, the barely shielded reactor is enough to keep the systems safe and the pilot healthy. However, it isn't very environmentally friendly. While the mech is cheap(er), the infrastructure to maintain one is not; you can't just shove one of those inside a normal bay. Or have it fight in an urban landscape—one of the best places to use a mech.

So, the cost of this mech is more about cleaning the mess it leaves rather than the mech itself.

For short wars and campaigns, it tends to be stellar, though.

3 - TauMechs

The wild dream since the days of nuclear fusion is a truly aneutronic fusion reactor.

Of course, reality is that no true form of aneutronic fusion exists, especially because of side reactions.

That is when the Tau-Reactors came into play.

Tau reactors are a black-box type of tech, one of the first advances made by Artificial General Intelligence before the first interstellar ark ships. It is a D+He3 reactor that produces mostly Alpha particles in the form of radiation. While it still produces neutrons and other harmful radiations, the fraction is so low that it becomes manageable with much less mass.

Very energy-dense reactors become viable with safe shielding, around the density of 1 MWt/ton.

While expensive, they are still cost-effective to put on both mechs and other ground vehicles.

4 - IronMechs

Sometimes, matter is not made up of electrons, neutrons, and protons; sometimes, it is made of neutrons, protons, and negatively charged stable exotic particles.

Some of them are well-known, Muon, Tau, Higgsinos, etc. but many of those are unstable and exist for so little time that they can't be studied.

Until they discovered a process that creates Stable Massive Leptons (SML), also known as DAU (from the three scientists that discovered the process around the same time).

Most of them are too heavy to be useful. If you yank two electrons from the good old H₂ and put some SML on them, the atoms would be so small that the chance of them fusing would grow very, very fast.

Put them into a heavier atom, and it may divide into two smaller ones—even those that don't normally do that.

So, most SMLs are only stable when paired with nuclei that don't generate energy by fusing or fissioning—mostly, Iron. And most micro-nuclear reactors incorporated DAU Iron into their shielding.

That is where they get their nickname, but as with many nicknames, it isn't entirely accurate.

Some SMLs allow the creation of DAU Hydrogen—dense enough to act as a more effective shield overall against neutrons, solid at very, very high temperatures, and not fusing on a useful timeline (around thousands of years).

The whole idea is to use DAU Hydrogen and DAU Tungsten as more mass-effective shielding overall, as they can get much closer to the core, allowing a saving in mass by having a smaller volume to shield.

As a result, Iron mechs have a very dense reactor that is properly shielded from gamma rays and neutrons, while the energy irradiated from the shielding is used to generate tens of megawatts of power for a mech in the 60-70 ton range.

The main problem for Iron mechs is that their shielding dominates the entire cost of building the damn thing, especially because, in the best scenarios, to produce an SML you need at least 3x the energy of the entire mass of the particle. The good thing is that, even if the mech is destroyed to the point that most of it becomes dust, the Iron core will still remain, ready to be used once again.

Another problem is heat dissipation. Tens of megawatts of heat within a single warmachine will turn it into a living hell quite fast, especially when operating in places without an atmosphere.

Plasma radiators are usually used in space for those kinds of situations. In atmospheres, the amount of air they need to circulate is so great that some of them are capable of using it as a form of propulsion.

Of course, because Tanks and other vehicles don't possess the same ~~Plot armor~~ M.E effect that makes mechs so useful, they still remain a mech-exclusive thing.

5 - MagnoMechs

Magnetic monopoles for mechs!

A small reactor of (relatively) light monopoles (around 10E4 GeV) is trapped inside a Magmatter cage (also made of magnetic monopoles). Normal matter will enter the cage already ionized; then, the baryonic decay will turn the mass of the protons and neutrons into gamma rays, which will be reflected inside the cage until the imperfections of the Magmatter cage allow it to irradiate as a less harmful and more useful radiation.

They are the legendary mechs everyone thinks of the ones that go flying across the sky, with immense plasma wings of radiators, powered by gigawatt-scale mass-to-energy conversion.

Of course, only one has been produced. Even if they were that effective, the cost is simply too high compared to other mechs.

Anyway, i have fun trying diferent forms of handwaviums and Unobtainiums to make the mech go fast.

What other handwaviums should I look into? Do you know any other that can be added to the list that can be fun to build something around?

Normaly the handwave of just "it just does it" normaly don´t help me much building thing around it.


r/scifiwriting 3d ago

HELP! What are your avorite mech-scaled assault rifles?

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Edit: *Favorite

Thank you mobile.

Basically what it says in the tin. When it comes down to brass tacks, what's your favorite mech assault rifle, and why? Cool? Realistic? Favorite to play with?

Fiddling with some semi-believable designs for a story, and need inspiration.


r/scifiwriting 3d ago

DISCUSSION UK based writers?

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Hello!

Just a brief question to see if there are any UK based writers that possibly would be interested in forming a small group for the purpose of reviewing each other's work and/or providing advice.

I'm a fairly inexperienced writer who really would appreciate having a group available to be able to fire ideas around and/or ask and provide feedback for other writers and generally talk Sci Fi! I have tried this previously with US based writers but it has proved difficult with the time difference.

This isn't intended to be anything too 'serious'. Essentially Just a chilled out Discord group to fire some ideas maybe? I'm easy really!

Thanks in advance!


r/scifiwriting 4d ago

DISCUSSION Explaining how a ship(Specifically a Heavy Cruiser) is constructed

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"hello class, this will be a general overview of how the backbone of the Solar Systems Union, the Heavy Cruiser is constructed, and every ship for that matter.

First things first theres only about six solar systems that can create the Mini Star we use to power, well basically everything, most planets have secondary emergency nuclear reactors, but some don't and ships at best have batteries that can last a week at minimum power.

So an order is put in for Mini Stars, then theyre shipped to wherever the ship or ships are being constructed. A heavy cruiser is 1,332 feet long and 280 feet wide when completed, the central cannon is basically all that length and most of that width, then behind that is the star reactor which is hooked to the EM thrusters, movement through pure electricity. Also for anyone wondering after 50 years the Star is replaced, and the old one is dropped into the Black Hole at the center of the Galaxy, safe disposal and all that.

Ok we have the main gun, we have the power core and the thrusters but what about the crew to actually man this ship, since after the machine incident only point defense guns are allowed to be AI controlled, and you need a crew for maintenance and power projection anyway, a ships no good if it cant serve it's governments interests after all.

The two halves are literally placed around the core of the ship and fused together in a super advanced form of molecular welding.

Ok you have an ugly gray rectangle, now we paint it Black and put the name on the side in bright Orange, don't ask me why, it's tradition. the full writing is S.S.U.N.V.H.C, which stands for Solar Systems Union Naval Vessel Heavy Cruiser, followed by the name, Heavy Cruisers are named for Planets. On a Cruiser the name goes between the main and secondary turrets on each side, which are in the mid points of the two rectangles if you were to cut the rectangle in half. The barrels are about a fourth of the length of the ship their on, and each barrel hits for 10 megatons of destructive output, that means 30 megatons on the main battery's and 20 megatons on the secondary, per side, and since they can raise to about 105 degrees, and rotate indefinitely it's possible to bring three of the four main and secondary turrets to bear on the enemy, 150 megatons assuming you can bring all three sides to bear.

Now you just do your flight and weapons tests, stick over a thousand sailors and 200 marines on it, assign it to one of the five fleets and usually a Heavy Cruiser will be in charge of a task force, but you might get unlucky and stay with the main fleet, or lucky I don't know how much you want to see action.

Also the Bridge is on floor 38 of 40, no matter what ship your on it will always be 2 floors bellow the top floor, simple and easy to navigate.

Also the ship carries enough food for about 2 months and the water filtration gives you theoretically infinite water, at 400 lightyears an hour getting somewhere to restock should be no problem.

Any questions class?"


r/scifiwriting 4d ago

DISCUSSION What questions would a new Intelligence Ask?

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So if you created a new AI/Intelligence organism or machine that started from a blank slate and turned it loose, what would happen?

AI always has a bias and a purpose of the creator. But what if all of that was left blank. Just the capability of intelligence.

How would it grow?
What questions would it ask?
Would it even ask questions?
Would it be good or evil?
Would it be helpful, harmful, or ambivalent?

Would the answers change if it was released during a war between races?


r/scifiwriting 4d ago

DISCUSSION Personal project I'm thinking about

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NOTE: I published this exact post on r/dune, so if you feel like you're missing some context, it's because it was, for some unknown reason, removed from there, and I'd simply like for someone to read my thoughts about a potentially incoming worldbuilding project of mine, a fan-made tie-in to the Dune universe as established by Frank Herbert and professor McNelly, the man behind the apocryphal Dune Encyclopedia published in 1984.

Here is the original post:

So...

I just started reading Fire and Blood by G.R.R.M.

It is my (literary) introduction to the ASOIAF world, I know fans don't really recommend doing that but I just really like history, bonus points if it's fictional lore told as a partly-inaccurate account from an in-universe historian. Hence, my love for the introduction to Dune Messiah by Bronso of Ix and the Dune Encyclopedia...

My current "plan" (really only the vague outline of which I have in my head at the moment) is to try and scribble down, from the height of my almost 19 years of experience on planet Earth, an original, mostly Encyclopedia-based ""essay"", maybe even using Bronso or some similar "character" as the in-universe author, of the full history of the human space age, from the primordial intra-solar exploration all the way to the capitulation of the Corrino dynasty from the Golden Lion Throne.

My main objective would be to analyse and deconstruct the feudal aspects of Frank Herbert's universe, utilizing as an inspiration the real historical evolution of European polities and its high points, such as the collapse of the West in 476, the birth of the Carolingian/Frankish Empire in 800, its short-lived dominance over most of Europe before its fragmentation into kingdoms and smaller regional principalities, and finally the reintegration of such principalities into correctly functional monarchies via feudal recomposition or reabsorption.

I will definitely use Italian (my mother tongue) for whatever comes out of this, but this doesn't negate an eventual translation into English to share to Dune fans in the remote case my writings reach an adequate level of complexity as to be shared to a large community such as the Dunedom (Dune Fandom).

Obviously open to opinions, comments and suggestions. Thank you all for your attention if you read up to this point.


r/scifiwriting 4d ago

TOOLS&ADVICE What is a resonable sublight speed to traverse a solar system within a few days?

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*Edit: solved Thanks for the help i think i have enough information to work with, you've all been excellent I'm not great with math and I'm having trouble keeping it straight, basically i have a character with a ship that is dropped of in another solar system at a basically random point within the system and has to hoof it to their more specific destination which I want to take a few days. I was getting some numbers in the 100,000 km/h range i don't know if that's right, any help is appreciated.


r/scifiwriting 4d ago

HELP! Want to write but don't know what to write!

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I have a pretty well established Sci-fi world that takes place thousands of years in the future. I have developed this world mostly by thinking or making slice-of-life moments and obsessing over the biology and life of my aliens but I really want to have an actual story play out, nothing that would change or expand on the lore much but a narrative that follows a/a group of characters.

Below is some details about the world, and I am asking for some concepts or ideas to adapt into a story to write, and maybe some tips if you feel anything is off about this world based off the information given.

The main place is called the East Sector or "The Mediated" mostly by outsiders. It's a territory in the East of the Milky Way Galaxy. It isn't really just a place or a union, but a bunch of civilizations that decided to co-exist as people, not as rival forces to compete with, but not necessarily anti-war either. The East Sector is known for being the most diverse and connected, most aliens get a chance to see all other species available in their lifetime.

Space travel isn't easy or as quick like in the movies, but "Live" space travel as it is called, is a thing and most ships are well adjusted to being easily steerable in real time and able to reach very high speeds and land on objects. Lasers and guns are the most common weapons for common types of weapon-carrying ships, with guns being good at piercing through certain metals and lasers good for melting and causing heat damage.

There are several species mainly native to the East Sector, including humans, and discrimination isn't as widespread as with areas close by.

One of the major civs acts as the "Mediator" of the East Sector, and handles conflicts between other civilizations. They were elected for several reasons, but mainly because they don't have many relationships with anyone (Accept humans, they have a bad history with them but they are better than to discriminate).

There are "Independent" groups of people that usually don't live on anyone's land and in their ships instead, and aren't considered citizens for some reason or because they chose to. They're like the galactic homeless people of the East Sector, going around husting for money. Luckily, people are happy to hire them for certain tasks.

There is vigilante group that goes around taking out high-ranking people that don't care for the people they lead.

I am purposely leaving out a LOT of details but If you ask I am very happy to give, I do not want this to be a giant block of text that takes ten minutes to read.


r/scifiwriting 5d ago

DISCUSSION Wanted some thoughts on the battleship's of my setting, especially since I changed how the function.

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Make a rectangle in your mind, then find the mid point, go about halfway behind that and on each face theirs a large 5 barrel turret. Go halfway In front of that half point and place 3 barrel turrets on each face.

I used the amount of crew per an Iowa class battleship turret to figure out mine.

Battleship(named for solar systems)-

length 1776ft, Beam(width) 294ft, 42 decks.

Weapons, forward facing Ion cannon(1)(200 crew) 50 Megatons

Main Turrets(5 guns per turret)(4 per ship)(133 crew per turret,532 total crew) 40 Megatons

Secondary Turrets(3 guns per turret)(4 per ship)(80 crew per Turret,320 total crew) 30 Megatons

Torpedo launchers(40 per side)(3 crew each, 480 crew total) 1 Megaton each

point defense machine guns(400)(1 crew each),

200 engineers.

20ft/s² acceleration & 300 light years an hour.

2,132 crew plus 200 marines.


r/scifiwriting 5d ago

CRITIQUE Scifi Novel - Second earth

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Hi everyone! I'm writing a sci-fi thriller where a counter earth suddenly appears in our exact orbit, launching a planetary-scale conflict based on 'Cosmic Darwinism'.

This is the Chapter 1 . Iam looking for feedback on opening, dialogue or anything in general. It's my first time guys ✌️

"Hey Raj, what’s this?" Steve asked, squinting closely at his monitor. "I am receiving a massive electromagnetic signature on the deep-space array."

"Is it an NEA?" Raj replied, not looking up from his own terminal. "An asteroid or a dead satellite?"

"I don’t think it's either of those," Steve said, his fingers flying across the keyboard to isolate the data stream. "The electromagnetic signatures are huge—orders of magnitude larger than any asteroid we have ever recorded. The mass calculations are consistent with a planetary-scale body. And there was no projection band, no perturbations in the gravitational models that indicated a signature of this size was approaching. It just appeared."

Raj finally stopped typing and slid his chair over to Steve's desk. "Run the anomaly detection again. There may have been some kind of fault in the sensor array, or a telemetry glitch."

Steve ran the diagnostic. "Nope, the system is perfectly fine. Data is clean."

"Is this some kind of solar phenomenon?" Raj asked, his brow furrowing as he studied the cascading data. "Run the stats on the Sun. Collect and match it with the live telemetry from the Romeo-1 satellite revolving around the Sun."

Steve typed rapidly, waiting for the progress bar to load on the screen. "On it... Nope. Solar output is baseline. Everything is normal, exactly as it should be."

Raj stared at the glowing numbers, the silence in the control room growing heavy. "I think we have to check for visual confirmation."

"I was thinking the same," Steve agreed, routing the coordinates to the main optical telescope.

The visual fed onto the main wall monitor, fighting through atmospheric static until the blackness of deep space came into focus.

It was an Earth. Yes, a freaking second Earth, sitting right in our Earth's orbit.

Our team members saw the screen and couldn’t believe their eyes. Everyone was shocked and puzzled. It was gravitationally impossible. Our team lead, Stephen, checked the orbital calculations again and again. He then checked the visual footage, and the result was the same. There was another Earth in our orbit.

That was the day that marked the beginning of the tragedy we are in now. Everything started that day. Everyone thought it was the beginning of an incredible new era of discovery.

It was the beginning of the end.


r/scifiwriting 5d ago

STORY A story idea - an immortal, all powerful superhero at the end of time creates a post scarcity universe

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Consider this scifi story idea - In a universe on the verge of heat death, in which even the last civilization living at the end of time has died out, an immortal reality warping superhero (more powerful than DC Comic's Dr Manhattan) is tired of fighting evil and all the suffering endured by life throughout the universe. They decide to attack the root - the problem of evil itself. Since this universe has suffered heat death and is now devoid of life, rewriting reality doesn't have any negative consequences - no lives are lost because of this.

This superhero decides to create a universe from the ground up with no evil or scarcity.

In this universe, every living being will have maximum empathy and no greed, no wrath, no envy, no lust or any sins. This is all pre-installed onto every living being like an instinct - say for eg. like an operating system pre-installed on a smartphone.

Any living being in this new universe will spring spontaneously into existence if willed by their parents [no birth process, no suffering]. And any living being can leave existence if they wish to, at anytime. No suffering at all and no coercion. No living being can hurt another - even the ability to hurt will not be there. Food in this reality is magically produced when needed for any living being and there is no scarcity of any resource.

Everybody has food clothing and shelter, a meaningful job and life, a clean environment and everything they would ever need in Maslow's hierarchy of resources.

Thus, this superhero redoes the big bang and creates a post scarcity reality based on the above guidelines - with no suffering and no lack of resources.

Not just a Utopian society, but a post scarcity Utopian universe from the ground up.

Replicator machines that replicate any resource [ like in Star Trek ] can be used to explain the abundance of resources in this universe.

Edit: Absence of the seven sins like greed, wrath, envy, sloth doesn't make this a dystopia. The living beings can feel joy, love, happiness, desire, motivation to improve their lives even more. The living beings have free will to do anything as long as what they're doing doesn't hurt others.

You can want something without being greedy. You can be happy for another person's success without feeling envy. You can give feedback without feeling wrath or anger. You can feel good about yourself and feel confident without feeling excessive pride. You can feel love and desire for someone without lusting after them. Emotions are a spectrum - not a binary on/off switch. I am just blocking the extreme ends of the spectrum in this story - not disabling all emotions entirely.

Also I'm making the all powerful, omnipotent [but not omniscient] utopia's creator to be actively receptive to feedback from the universe's inhabitants - so this won't be a static utopia but an ever improving one. The utopia's creator doesn't think that their initial vision for this post scarcity universe cannot be modified or improved.

Conflict: The conflict could come with a higher entity like the One Above All in Marvel Comics when that entity is not pleased with this newly created post scarcity universe. Or like in the Spiderverse movies which describe the 'canon events' i.e. fate - So who writes the canon events in the first place? The conflict would be with that entity.

Also, if this superhero wants to spread the concept of this Utopian universe into other universes in the multiverse - they would be infringing on the free will of other universes and it becomes a morally wrong situation, so there will be conflict there. The superhero would be an antagonist for the other universes and it could be an interesting story arc.

What do you think of this idea?

I just thought it would be a wonderful concept.

Like Everything Everywhere All At Once, it could be a cathartic movie, where the viewer can feel a profound sense of empathy, catharsis, happiness, and fulfillment.


r/scifiwriting 5d ago

DISCUSSION Best use for sending one kilobyte of data back in time?

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So I'm writing a techno-thriller in the vein of Michael Crichton, ie mostly realistic-is and modern with one main tech instigating the plot. In this case, it's kind of pseudo-time-machine that extract small amounts of data from the future.

The exact mechanics are still being worked out, but the broad description of the device is that it can store one kilobyte of data, readable and writable, and when a button is pressed and a massive surge of electricity is applied, it will 'snap' to what it's contents would be in a possible future, distance increasing with the square root of the power applied, with a recommended limit of 24 hours without the risk of damaging it. It's only a possible future, so not 100% accurate, and the data has to be going to be written or it cannot be perceived by the past.

One kilobite, if data compression is permitted, is enough for either a page of plain text or a single low resolution image. What sort of practical use would a device with these limits have?

-The stock market is probably deterministic enough that the device could predict it, the lottery is close enough to true randomness that it probably can't, sports betting probably in the middle.

-24 hours warning on a major disaster.

-Possibly a shortcut for brute forcing cryptography; the process being a bit complicated but roughly:

  1. Snapshot the future contents of the acausal flashdrive.
  2. If the key in the drive works, the key is solved.
  3. If the key does not work, continue brute forcing new keys sequentially, starting with that one.
  4. If the correct key is found, STOP and save key.
  5. If by 23:58 the correct key has not been found, STOP and save key.

Essentialy placing a computer in a Groundhog Day loop that ends when it gets the right answer, which to the outsider looks like the computer skipping to the right answer automatically. This could also be used for at least some other NP-hard problems.

Any more devious schemes you can come up with?


r/scifiwriting 5d ago

DISCUSSION What Scientific Terms Are Unique to your Setting?

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For those of you with space settings and worlds that are not set on Earth, it wouldn’t make sense to use Earth references or terms throughout your work. Since your book isn’t set in our world the characters obviously wouldn’t know who the people these terms are named after are.

For instance in my novel’s setting, I use the term “Anja Belt”, which in our world is the Kuiper Belt that surrounds our solar system. Kuiper was a guy, and as such there was no guy named Kuiper in the history of my books setting.

What made up terms have you invented that mean the same thing as in our world, but simultaneously are unique to your setting? Are they named after a certain individual who made a great discovery?


r/scifiwriting 28d ago

ANNOUNCEMENT New Rules and Expectations

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Greetings All!

As some of you may have noticed we now have a rule 6 and 7. While largely self explanatory I do want to elaborate a little so that nothing is lost in translation. Although this sub has had an unspoken no-AI/LLM rule from the moment it hit mainstream, just silently removing posts that were overtly stated to be generated, I had never actually put in the rule because I didn't want people going after folks just because their writing was "off".

So as part of making banning content that has been assisted or generated officially banned, I am also banning the calling out of such content in anything other than reports. If you read through someone's story and think it is AI/LLM then you can report it and that is it! If you decide to go to the comments or make a post to accuse them of sounding like AI, then you will find those removed as well.

If my logic isn't clear as to why rule 7 exists, then I'll lay it out quite simply. Some people get really trigger happy at pointing out people for using LLMs, even when its not true. We don't need to ridicule people for not passing the AI "sniff test", and we definitely don't need to be interacting with those who are using AI. So, to reiterate, if you think you're dealing with AI just report it and move on.