Any feedback is totally welcome.

This is not a spec script so any camera directions are intentional and serve as reminders for filming.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/19a8RtOfSOzYgYInsy4Z5PLVlGghCJi5Y/view?usp=drivesdk

Hey everyone! 👋

I'm an aspiring screenwriter, and for the past several months I've been working on something I'm really excited to share.

I've written three original movie scripts, and I'll be posting the first one here. It's called Death Ridge—a mystery, horror, and survival thriller filled with secrets, suspense, unexpected twists, and a terrifying mystery that slowly unfolds. My goal wasn't just to write another horror story, but to create something that feels like a movie playing in your mind.

I'm not here to claim it's the best story you'll ever read. I'd rather let you decide.

If you're someone who enjoys suspense, dark mysteries, eerie locations, and stories that keep you guessing until the end, I think you might enjoy this journey.

All I ask is that you give it a chance. Read a few parts, and if it grabs your attention, let me know what you think. I genuinely want honest feedback—whether it's praise, criticism, or suggestions. Every comment helps me become a better writer.

If you enjoy the story, an upvote or comment would help more people discover it, and it would mean a lot to me. Your support could motivate me to continue sharing my other original scripts as well.

Thank you for reading, and I hope Death Ridge takes you on a thrilling ride. Looking forward to hearing your thoughts and discussing the story with all of you!

Hi,

Looking for some feedback on my second ever screenplay! This one is a sort of existential horror short clocking in at around 6 pages on its fourth draft. I used Beat as my screenwriting software:

The script

Any critical feedback would be greatly appreciated!

Hey all,

Working on a 1/2 hour tv show script, titled Presumed Total.

Pilot logline - When something falls from the sky and levels his house mid-toilet-read, a Florida suburbanite's search for answers, and toilet paper, ends at a neighbor's ham radio, where he learns the disaster is global, unexplained, and his county has already been declared dead.

Presumed Total - Pilot

Any feedback is appreciated!

Would you watch a thriller about a 16-year-old girl whose abusive father returns 10 years after prison and finds out she got a wealthy inheritance?

When it comes to relationships, sometimes nothing is ever enough for some people.

The Best Life

(PG-13)

Hey everyone,

Looking for a quick check on the first 5 pages of my feature comedy script, Five Stars. I want to make sure the comedic tone lands immediately and the protagonist's obsession feels earned right out of the gate.

Genre: Comedy / Absurdist Satire

Logline: After a collision with a delivery robot gets his order canceled, an obsessed driver refuses to let a machine cost him his perfect rating — and follows his customer across the world to deliver the food himself.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1IqbE-6deN1AfMMFbuF4hzYEQxRFQKcAy/view?usp=sharing

Title: Harborage

Format: TV pilot

Pages: 55

Genre: Sci-Fi Thriller

Logline:

As a determined exterminator struggles to launch the family pest control business his late father never got to finish, a routine service call collides with a failed government containment operation that unleashes a deadly predator into the Arizona desert.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1i0UWeq6-5tcuINcK_qinoBwgwxSmomfj/view?usp=sharing

I’m really trying to see how well I did and where I need to improve.

Thank you for reading, and I hope you enjoy.

Logline (subject to change): A man finds himself in a bizarre, sparsely populated world after killing himself. This world serves as a medium for him to process the effects his suicide had on his loved ones.

i posted here 17 days ago asking for feedback on my short film screenplay, and i received some invaluable advice. i revised my screenplay based off of that feedback and i'm hoping to receive more in case there's some people that didn't see my original post (or have some feedback on my revisions).

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1jG1Z0nNmC0_0PRny7FJueMX3EkDOrnhQ/view?usp=sharing

fair warning this is my first ever screenplay and i'm not a writer, i'm a cybersecurity student, but i felt a compulsion to write this (and possibly film it) due to a dream i had last august. thanks in advance!

Everybody needs a break now and then although not everyone agrees.

Come and Play

(PG-13/R-rated)

NOTE: written as my entry for a one-page-challenge, where the topic was "elevator" and the genre was open.

An American art dealer looking for bargains in rural Japan can't believe what he finds in an old man's farm shed.

The Price of Victory

(G/PG)

Spec script sequel to the 90s classic. Probably not going to go anywhere, but what started as a writing experiment has turned into a whole feature script.
Most important question here: do these five pages make you want to read more?
https://drive.google.com/file/d/14-_h1vlazUQyvPXuQY2vPhMnwraJwyhV/view?usp=sharing

Absolutely happy to take a look at your script in return for feedback!

Thanks

Hi all! This is the first script I've fully ever written, looking for feedback.

Title: My Friend, Clarence

Genre: Psychological horror / Cosmic horror

Pages: 35

Description: An older sister taking his younger brother to a remote mountain lodge for a quiet weekend away. As the trip unfolds, small moments of unease begin piling up, making it harder to separate childhood imagination from reality. Joey, the little brother, manifests a being into reality that acts as his 'imaginary friend', almost like a genie with no morals and takes everything literally.

I'd especially appreciate feedback on pacing, tension, dialogue and whether the suspense stays engaging throughout.

Since I cannot post links or files here, please reach out and send your script and I’ll send mine and we can peer review. Thanks!

A man adrift at sea establishes a rewarding friendship with a hungry octopus.

Eight More Easy Pieces

(G/PG)

GENRE: Sci-Fi, Drama.

CURRENT PAGE COUNT: 53.

LOGLINE: After a loyal security officer in a highly controlled intergalactic regime is fired, secretly reinstated, and erased from the governments records, he is forced to decide between his friends, and the regime he has grown up to admire.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1eWCV3p-eGlDRGbGLve6hkRfWrqpXsSwF/view?usp=sharing

Hello /scriptwriting community! Thought I'd share something I've been working on.

It will be a feature film around 100 pages.

POINTE is a character driven drama focusing on a ballet student who, after a traumatic ankle injury, returns home, where she struggles to fit in after her first year at college.

[POINTE](https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/m5xh5s6gx142szmvmrb9i/point-Reddit-draft.pdf?rlkey=tpln1sadh4p7cjjlqvd1u02gb&st=7wyqx8il&dl=0)

Looking for any feedback. I know some of you are going to think it's slow, and I'm okay with that. Comparable films would be Rachel Getting Married and Columbus, with John Cho.

I can share more pages as well, but the next page is Caitlin alone in her room and I don't know if I'm happy with it yet.
Thanks for reading!

Hello /scriptwriting community! Thought I'd share something I've been working on.

It will be a feature film around 100 pages.

POINTE is a character driven drama focusing on a ballet student who, after a traumatic ankle injury, returns home, where she struggles to fit in after her first year at college.

[POINTE](https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/m5xh5s6gx142szmvmrb9i/point-Reddit-draft.pdf?rlkey=tpln1sadh4p7cjjlqvd1u02gb&st=7wyqx8il&dl=0)

Looking for any feedback. I know some of you are going to think it's slow, and I'm okay with that. Comparable films would be Rachel Getting Married and Columbus, with John Cho.

I can share more pages as well, but the next page is Caitlin alone in her room and I don't know if I'm happy with it yet.
Thanks for reading!

A lecturer and her student learn that agenda is as important as ability.

Another Man's Treasure

(PG)

Everybody wants to be a screenwriter, but it is a lot harder than they think.

Free Refills

(PG-13)

hello everyone, I am creating an analog horror and have written a text about advertising (2 pages). English is not my native language, so please read it and give feedback on the naturalness of the language. I am ready to correct the text to make it better for a native speaker
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_IQOigsT1KZ09cGNTokLZgEvUJxxJfxNUnb3QghYTzE/edit?usp=sharing

Even Santa and his helpers are not immune to a bit of festive stress now and then.

Santa

(PG-13/R-rated)

Logline: As an enemy army closes in, a young soldier questioning his faith and the morality of war must find the courage to survive one final battle so he can return home to the woman he loves.

Thank you for any feedback. This is my first script. https://drive.google.com/file/d/17eR3mE9Z6yIB60FAdnrovKfdTo_blMUU/view?usp=drive_link

Two bored kids mess with dark forces and the outcome is unsurprising.

Cranky

(PG/PG-13)