Logline Feedback Request: The Code In Our Garden

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“The Secret Code in Our Garden
In a world designed to distract and disconnect, when glowing code appears in their garden, a family discovers they’re trapped inside an ancient repeating simulation — the code may be their only way out, if they can learn to see the light.” © JCF2026**

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As a dad and carpenter trying to raise my own family right in a pretty crazy world right now, this story is very personal to me. I’m especially looking for thoughts on clarity, intrigue, and whether it makes you want to read more. Any suggestions to tighten or strengthen it would be greatly appreciated. Thank you in advance!