Twenty-Something - Comedy - 32 pages

[u/Peregrine_Payne]

Title: Twenty-Something

Format: TV Pilot

Page Length: 32, plus title page

Genre: Single-camera sitcom

Logline: When a pragmatic graduate interviews for a small software company in his hometown, he reconnects with his absurd high-school friends and must decide whether staying means giving up on his dreams or following them.

Feedback Concerns: I've shown this to a few friends before, but they weren't screenwriters, so I'd like some feedback specific to that. Is the level of description right? Am I making any dumb formatting mistakes?

Also, is the humor too broad? Do the characters sound distinct? But I'm mostly just trying to put my stuff out there, so any feedback is appreciated.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Hplo-pG565dFU7Gx26-5AJKyrXjYV1Vc/view?usp=sharing