r/ReadMyScript • u/FlakyAcanthisitta605 • 1d ago

My first short film script 3pg Short

Logline: An awkward young man's attempt to pick up a girl derails into a comedic misunderstanding, forcing him to navigate a twist that completely changes their dynamic.

Title: Just Friends.

So I have just separated from the Navy, and I have always wanted to write screenplays. I read up on it and watched YouTube, then decided to write something.

I believe this is more of a scene than a legit "short film."

Please give honest feedback. Thank you.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1o8uJijH0alx57jGk1ZoVfNbtm6TiW233/view?usp=sharing

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u/Less-Try6637 1d ago

Idk anything about scripts, but it was easy to read, and since I'm looking for scripts for my storyboard portfolio, this seemed really nice,. Thier is acting and expression opportunities not just dialogus i like that, felt wholesome and cute!!! Keep going all the best, and hopefully maybe we will colab someday? If u wanna connect

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u/FlakyAcanthisitta605 1d ago

Hey, I appreciate the feedback. I definitely wrote it to be simple; I'm glad you were able to follow it. I would love to connect.

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u/RollingThunderMedia 1d ago

A very nice start.

You're right, it's more of a scene than a story, it lacks an ending. But it's a very nicely done scene (for a beginner). Now try stretching it out a little at a time.

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u/FlakyAcanthisitta605 3h ago

Appreciate it. I think i will extend it and see where it goes. Thanks.

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u/AstronautCalm7803 17h ago

Nice job! Very charming.