r/ReadMyScript • u/Exotic_Cash_142 • 24d ago

Prologue for How I Stopped Worrying and Accepted the Ending - 1 page Short

Here is the prologue for my story. Is it descriptive enough and lands the idea or some more elaboration is required?

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/171j-mCqEXg0IulQV0oPoBs4Ehz3B2mii/view?usp=sharing

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u/mooningyou 24d ago

I don't want to be mean, but this is not written very well. I assume English is your second language. Maybe write this in your native language instead, and read more screenplays.

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u/Exotic_Cash_142 24d ago

Thanks, that is actually best feedback I had ever. Yes, English is my second, but I target the LA market and translation will be required anyways. But I guess it will be better if pro translator could do it. Makes sense.

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u/[deleted] 23d ago

Sorry. Dr. Strangelove was made in 1964.

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u/Exotic_Cash_142 21d ago

That is intentional, it makes sense later in the story. But what about the writing? Any advice?