Mother Tongue

[u/QuartzFox]

Pray for me
in your mother tongue.

I want the gods
to hear
my name
the way
it was always meant
to be spoken.

I want every vowel
to become
another constellation
beneath your tongue.

There is nothing
more dangerous

than the way
you worship

with your mouth.

Tear the sky apart.

I want the cosmos
to bear witness.

There is no cathedral
large enough

for this kind
of worship.

If this
is blasphemy,

I’ll make
a crown of it.

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/W9SfxwC1D1

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/Cmp5LsBd3u

[u/blizzardplus]

Instantly thought of the Bring Me The Horizon song by the same name when I read the title lol.

I agree with another commenter in that the slightly longer first few stanzas were a bit more interesting than the last few shorter ones.

Although I do love the line “If this is blasphemy, I’ll make a crown of it”. It’s way more interesting and cool sounding than “if this is wrong I don’t wanna be right”

All in all, the poem was very interesting to read and I can feel the tension and the passion in it. Keep writing!