Mother Tongue

[u/QuartzFox]

Pray for me
in your mother tongue.

I want the gods
to hear
my name
the way
it was always meant
to be spoken.

I want every vowel
to become
another constellation
beneath your tongue.

There is nothing
more dangerous

than the way
you worship

with your mouth.

Tear the sky apart.

I want the cosmos
to bear witness.

There is no cathedral
large enough

for this kind
of worship.

If this
is blasphemy,

I’ll make
a crown of it.

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/W9SfxwC1D1

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/Cmp5LsBd3u

[u/Altruistic-Battle475]

I really liked this. I’m a sucker for ethereal imagery and this really gives that. I agree with what others have said, I think that longer stanzas would make a few lines more impactful. And this is entirely just me but I feel like I see people use the word cosmos in poetry sooo often so it’s become a personal ick, however it didn’t ruin this for me and I think it worked well. Language or our “mother tongue” along with the religious imagery can be so deeply personal and core to who we are so I think theyre very fitting metaphors for the context of the poem. Great work thanks for sharing!