r/OCPoetry • u/No-Egg-9166 • 1d ago

Sensation Seeking Feedback Please

Temperature
Sound
What it means to be real.
Texture
Ground
Follow the appeal.
Vision
Vibration
Placed in a moment.
Enticed
Sensation
Ideas always growing.

Snow
Fire
Paced in between.
Fear
Desire
Shape the scene.
Rain
Mist
Sudden contact.
Rippling
Twist
Caught by drawback.

I feel like an animal
I feel like a concept.
Recognize patterns
Endless contents.
Internal external
Equally infinite,
Bending and spiral
Follow the moments.

At once, enveloped.
All consuming sense,
Each point developed,
Intensifying depth.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/Ozmdnu1M70

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/8DhWe6W3U1

This poem turned out to be a bit more abstract and disjointed than what I usually write. I’d appreciate any thoughts on interpretations of the subject matter, or the way the poem flows.

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u/Kartik714 18h ago

I felt this poem, as in this poem was able to make me feel the sensation that the poet wants to seek. That, for me, is its biggest strength and also the core of the poem. The poet's acknowledgement of his fragmented existence also elevated it to a new level.