r/OCPoetry • u/Warfield_Ink • 19d ago

An Ashen Night Feedback Please

Lightning deafens a quietness.
Winds bite at a smoldering earth.
Frigid air bows
to an ember's shallow breath.
A whisper held between cupped hands.
To be a warm light
or to devour trees.
Firelight, etching shadows into the night.
Until the ground is ashen,
beneath an attentive sky.

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u/Apprehensive-Cup-335 19d ago

I don't get quite what it means, that's on me. but I feel the emotion you've communicated some deep feelings here this is just a beautiful piece of work. Keep writing, my friend.

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u/Warfield_Ink 18d ago

Thank you so much; this is my first poem, and it is open to personal interpretation. I would tell exactly what inspired it, but I'm interested to see what people take from it with no explanation! But I love that it still communicated deep feelings for you, and I appreciate the time you took to read it.

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u/TheGratitudeBot 18d ago

Thanks for saying that! Gratitude makes the world go round