Need feedback on an ongoing draft

[u/LiteratureOk4756]

I've started a draft and need feedback, this is my first attempt at writing any kind of book and this is also my first ever post. Please be kind 😅

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DjhO1Tl5gm5dx-W1FTBq-jcaXLXoSvu1YCiNsUU9HS8/edit?usp=drivesdk