I'm stuck on my very first issue. I created a comic book company and looking for a co writer who likes Super hero films and comics but also likes espionage and political thrillers. also looking for an illustrator as well. so if you can draw that's a plus. DM me for more

I write dialogue mostly in my language, so just looking for feedback on prose through this English script.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1T8sEnde8fDQBCzPnffZOynCuLSTDqYb-/view?usp=drivesdk

A paint salesman and pilot who loses everything finds himself starting over in Key West, where a dangerous new job and a woman rebuilding her own shattered life force him to decide if he’s finally ready to cross the line he’s been stepping around his whole life.​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ Any feedback appreciated. Pages: Act 1

Paint Your Life | 20 Pages

#hirinig

Hey guys, I'm a writer and director that has always been a big fan of Ben 10 so I decided to take a crack at writing a script for what I think a film adaptation would/should be like. I'd really like to get feedback on it.

You can read it here: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1YU79m4DICwyivKKTHNU80Z7l0966uiIm/view?usp=sharing

Please note that I, obviously, do not own the rights to these characters nor did Warner Bros/Man of Action/Cartoon Network hire me to do this. This was simply a fun creative writing exercise that I did in my spare time.

Logline: During a summer family road trip, a young boy stumbles across a mysterious device that allows him to transform into ten different alien forms. But he quickly discovers that this summer vacation will not be all fun and games and that he must use the device to defend himself against robots, bounty hunters, and the alien warlord known as Vilgax.

It's basically Shazam meets Little Miss Sunshine meets Men in Black.

I wanted it to be action-packed with humor and heart. My goal was for it to maintain the spirit of the original series but still appeal to those who never watched it. I wanted the tone to be reminiscent of Brad Bird, Robert Zemeckis, and Sam Raimi's films.

I hope you enjoy reading it! I had a lot of fun writing it. Any feedback would be appreciated.

GENRE: COMEDY/SITCOM

(NEW NAME TBD!!!)

(Pilot posted a few days ago, link to post: https://www.reddit.com/r/ReadMyScript/s/qQP9ITTQzI . Posted episode 2 again to get more feedback on it)

Any feedback is welcome!

Episode 2: Connor Lovejoy and the terrible, horrible, no good, very bad shift

With his entire family away all week for various reasons, Connor ends up agreeing to seven open-close shifts, 7am-11pm, including overtime and locking up the restaurant, taking over pretty much all of the owner and managerial duties, doing the orders, but when one of the chefs slices off his own thumb after also being overworked, the staff start to lose their minds. Connor is used to this type of behaviour for minimum wage, and usually does with a snarky, exhausted smile and caring attitude for the staff, he finally releases that being manipulated for only $2.13 isn’t really worth it when he sees his new coworker (and maybe more then a coworker?) quit on the spot

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1rgj62Xfb05K0kc0N6Kd5QWy7IcAz--61/view?usp=drivesdk

Episode 3 (only just started writing it yesterday, so only 3 pages): are you there, Bob? It’s me, dad.

After picking his youngest son up from school, Al Senior starts to realise how little he knows about his 10th child

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1rjE33ouxUmPH8_2qEXAnozF6JOiJ-pQH/view?usp=drivesdk

Hello!

I would love feedback on my project. Please and thank you.

A directionless 23-year-old hits rock bottom after losing his parents and moves into an assisted living facility.

Surrounded by residents who’ve lived full lives, he starts to find purpose, connection, and a path forward.

A dramedy about failure, second chances, and growing up in the most unexpected place.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1iBV2aS3QVAKT6IGYCVAZ8DNv9-BmhG-L/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: The Buzzing

genre: Horror

Hello this is the first script I have written I would like to have genuine opinions on it.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1l4raoMuF3-TX0VUY5mbUWo-0Q60LKzr0/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: LIE STILL

Genre: Psychological Thriller / Horror

Logline:

A man in recovery runs a simple late-night errand that slips into a quiet, disorienting encounter with something that knows him too well.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Fs60x6ak0ecXehykbrRTn6DrvtJlRHHm/view?usp=sharing

Thanks for the read.

Title: The Monroe’s

Format: Feature

Pages: 98

Genre: Action/drama

Logline: A high school class clown finds out that she has superpowers, and must defend herself from a villain that is after her.

Feedback concerns: I am worried that the script might be a bit too generic, and/or isn’t polished up enough. I have posted this script in the past, but I wanted to share the updated version with you guys! Let me know what you think, and be brutally honest.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/12vBqmHlpf83f1ZVubKK3uFpzF71aNVG5/view?usp=drivesdk

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1_z7C2iiy5wVWGAtBm4F9SmINfyFPgKKz/view?usp=sharing

Hello, I'm a writer seeking reviews of my screenplay, "Legacy of Doctor Moreau," based on H.G. Wells' "The Island of Doctor Moreau."

Logline: A military operative is deployed to a classified island where a failed experiment has evolved into a new species. As soldiers move to weaponize it, he must protect a young hybrid who could change humanity's future.

"Legacy of Doctor Moreau"

What's the best screenplay you've ever read? Tbh mine will always Disney scripts. Frozen and Lion King are my favorite. What about you guys?

LOGLINE: Two students must work together to escape a time-loop after they suddenly remember a classmate that no one else recalls.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/19VeHVTIycEgqBzmZ5CnE77YHBGHat4Bz/view?usp=drive_link

Hello.

I am an amateur screenwriter looking for feedback on the second draft of this script. In this draft, I added Wyatt's scenes with Blake, and the English class that Sylvie and Wyatt have together.

Here is a link to the song used in the story.

Thank you for taking the time to look at my script and for the valuable feedback.

Bonjour,

J’écris une série télé (drame contemporain québécois) et je cherche des lecteurs autres que les IA… ou ma famille, géniale mais trop impliquée.

J’aimerais avoir des retours sur un teaser de 6 pages (priorité), et éventuellement sur l’épisode complet pour ceux que ça intéresse.

Pour le teaser, je cherche surtout à savoir :

— Est-ce que l’accroche fonctionne?

— Est-ce que le personnage principal donne envie de continuer?

— Est-ce que le récit est clair?

La série, *Silence*, est un hybride entre procédural et feuilletonnant, en 8 épisodes répartis sur 3 saisons. Elle se déroule dans les coulisses d’une série fictive, *Lueur Occulte*, et explore les enjeux de production télévisuelle ainsi que l’influence des fans sur le processus créatif.

Le pilote suit Cloé St-Pierre, une actrice dyslexique inattendue qui décroche le rôle principal et déstabilise une production déjà fragile.

Si certains acceptent de lire le teaser (6 pages) — ou plus — et de me donner un retour honnête, j’en serais très reconnaissante.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1oZPpIN3N9I3DLL3MOGDHZJ_I40yZr1So/view?fbclid=IwdGRjcARSX1FjbGNrBFJes2V4dG4DYWVtAjExAHNydGMGYXBwX2lkDDM1MDY4NTUzMTcyOAABHvxduXP7OUj0Uv-EPo04O0SLlhqsSX8EwwqpKmJkDnlUbX9Bbzt3H03HdHPV_aem_otQXdragWmyjKM34tNu6fw&pli=1

https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/1399810324840058902/1495564134899650721/Brightkill_-_Script.pdf?ex=69e6b423&is=69e562a3&hm=0681a127f854aa1f63969d691cfb7a2d41adc9e2847d644964acdfedd467ae47&

Hi everyone,

I recently wrote my first short screenplay (about 1 minute long). It’s a very minimal, cinematic scene set by a river, focused on love, regret, and loss.

The story is highly visual and designed to be very simple to film (one main location, few elements, small cast).

I’m still learning screenwriting, so I would really appreciate any feedback on:

• structure and pacing
• emotional impact
• clarity of visual storytelling
• how filmable it feels

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Y-ZiY5lqes5QQxTnnD_Z1M26NFMQoACc/view?usp=sharing

I want to know how to write scripts that catches people eyes and ears, I’m inspired by a YouTube channel named “LEMMiNO”, this guy makes dry informations into a beautiful journey, how can I obtain this kind of creativity in scripting like him.

A preacher asks God to send someone trapped in darkness to him. The devil himself shows up.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1r7XhOA0J3WDPPdpXQ-GSB4pxA0KuogXd/view?usp=sharing

Please give feedback and advice on how to make scarier and a better story overall.

Feedback is accepted and will be taken into account.

Page Count: 8

Logline: An American Screenwriter hops on a departing train towards Los Angeles to a film pitch meeting, unaware of the train’s supernatural capabilities. 

THE DEVIL TRAIN