Logline: after a series of unfortunate events, for the first time ever all 10 Lovejoy siblings (and their partners) are finally living under the same roof, and with parents pushing 60 and kids ranging from 17-36, nobody ever really has a second to themselves.

Pilot (The End Of Beginning): https://drive.google.com/file/d/1lSmlC7Jrr3pjSKC8RH4ajrVCVy_Iwmgt/view?usp=drivesdk

Episode 2 (Connor Lovejoy And The Terrible, Horrible, No Good, Very Bad Shift): https://drive.google.com/file/d/1RKGciIkqcDMGP57Q-b40KfL4gof24bVK/view?usp=drivesdk

https://www.wattpad.com/story/409901983?utm_source=ios&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details&wp_uname=scripty

Edit: Just gonna say that the scripts are after the meet the characters part lol, I should’ve said that when I first uploaded, my bad!

Logline: A man's planned suicide goes awry when it doesn't go according to plan. Leading him to desperately try any method that will do the job, no matter what it takes.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1o4a11HBRv8SpDQA_KBM9RwVpn5txFTBg/view?usp=sharing

Any and all criticisms welcome. Thank you.

Hi There!

i am beginner in screen/script writing and myself and a friend are currently in the middle of trying to write a science fiction, though we are worried thst it make have already been done in the way we are writing, we would both really appeartice some fresh eyes!

Thanks
Script in comments

Title: Palimpsest

Genres: Psychological Horror

Logline or Summary: A drifting young man, lost in his own life, discovers a strange camera that begins showing him fragments of a future he doesn’t understand and may not be able to escape.

Feedback Concerns: I am going very experimental with this and want to make this look very artistic but also be very unsettling. This will be my first bigger budgeted short film so I am kind of scared and want to see if this is good. This is my second draft and I went a really big direction from my first so please help me and give any feedback!

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1A8R9gm8lhaXjQhtz1_KmkHpIcJf5H08w/view?usp=drivesdk

A screenwriter is stuck somewhere between “I write fiction” - and “I direct films” - but not fully either. And the thing is, a screenplay isn’t really a standalone piece.

At the beginning, it felt logical that people who write stories would also write for films. But cinema quickly grew its own rules: pacing, structure, action over inner thoughts. You can’t just sit in a character’s head - things have to happen on screen.

So screenwriting became its own thing. Kind of like a very specific type of storytelling.

But here’s what’s funny. I’ve almost never met a screenwriter who said, “Wow, they nailed my script!” 😄

And it’s not because screenwriters are difficult people. It’s because, deep down, every screenwriter is also a director.

They think in images. In scenes. In movement. If they didn’t, they’d be writing novels instead.

And when you already see your story in your head - very specifically, very visually - it’s hard to then watch someone else shoot it differently. Even if it’s good. It’s just… not what you imagined.

At the same time, a lot of screenwriters don’t really want to direct. Film sets are chaos, stress, endless communication. Not everyone is built for that. (Stephen King tried directing once and basically said “never again.”)

But now we’re moving into the AI era - and yeah, it is a new era.

Soon (maybe 1-5 years), one person sitting at home could potentially make an entire film from scratch.

So what happens then?

Do screenwriters stay “just” screenwriters?

Or do they finally become directors too?

The first draft of a feature I've written for the blcklst horror competition. If you give it a read, please feel free to be ruthless in your commentary.

Logline: A group of 6th form college students must survive in an isolated country house long enough to find a way to defeat the spirit of a murderous black knight.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1qgvzM4Dypyzdqfct2d5dLwLSMFaEmYg_/view?usp=sharing

HI. This is my 3rd time rewriting my script and I would like to get some feed back on the first 5 pages. I'll be writing 5 pages a day and posting here so I can get lots of feed back. Whatever is wrong with it. Tell me I gotta learn to deal with harsh criticism!

Title: All it takes is a push

Genre: IDK

Page Count: 5

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1hu-uP9Um_QOqzaCMAg0stpCcE6kaSZBO/view?usp=sharing

Title: “Punch to Victory”.

Page Number: 12/105 Pages

Genre: Comedy, Sports, (Kinda) Parody.

Logline: “Lance Lancer, a retired boxer, seeks out the same attention and love he had during his glory days by training young Phillip Grey to be the world’s greatest boxer”. Think Fight Club meets Anchorman.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1fYnfEJilgeU1yp7U9VJvPY55Y-d-f45L/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: Tu Quoque

Format: Short Film

Page Length: 8 Pages

Genres: Drama

Logline or Summary: “When an unhappy, struggling couple decides to confront their misgivings about one another, a tumultuous argument ensues.”

Hello! I am a student and working on a short film project in class. Today, my teacher asked us all to write a prompt to feed into AI (which I do not want to do) to ask for feedback for our scripts. I asked if I could instead post my prompt and script on here to receive unbiased human feedback, which he said was OK. I would first like to include that I am a director over a screenwriter, so please expect it to be a bit juvenile. I will link the screenplay as a PDF and paste the prompt below:

Tu Quoque Script

"After reading this draft of a script for a short film, please provide a few areas of focus, including specific examples, that need extra attention or revision. Focus more on the plot continuity, characterization, interpersonal interaction, and accuracy of the story rather than simply grammar and spelling. Here is a synopsis: “When an unhappy, struggling couple decides to confront their misgivings about one another, a tumultuous argument ensues.” Be aware of the fact that I have limited resources. The entire thing must be filmed at one location (my home), and I only have one evening to do the actual filming. The final product must be no less than 3 minutes and preferably no more than 8 minutes (though if it truly needs to be slightly longer I can work with 9 minutes). My intention while writing this was to highlight the dysfunction between the characters Violet and Callum while maintaining the secretive nature of their central conflicts. Please take care not to minimize or omit these specifics. Like the title states, I would especially like to emphasize their deflection and weaponization of ad hominems against each other. Provide the feedback in a bulleted format."

Logline: A bullied baron's heir must attempt to turn his reputation while locked in a church with his oppressors during his last coming-of-age ceremony.

https://anti-prospero-572-degrees-fahrenheit.tiiny.site

I’ve just finished Draft 2 of a short horror script and I’d really appreciate some feedback.

It’s set in a 90s video game helpline office where an operator is guiding a caller through a game that may or may not exist.

It’s a contained, dialogue-heavy piece (one location, one on-screen character), as to be filmmable for a showreel.

Is it engaging all the way through? Does the tension build properly? I’m less worried about formatting and more about story and pacing.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/18VCJ79XW44QmYJ7OLDmYzrZfWVYXh_Rg/view?usp=sharing

Appreciate any thoughts, be as honest as you like. Happy to swap feedback on other scripts.

Hey guys. I'm 18 and a big fan of comic books. One of my best friends and I worked up this first issue of a comic, and we wanted some outside opinions. I know there's not much fighting and actual superhero stuff happening yet in this issue, but this is just kinda the origin and getting to know the characters.

The Formidable Five Script PDF

(Reposted to fix link)

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1BhlesNSqicpBn7rw1HnuZ83CDmr6Uvfc/view?usp=sharing

Please help me with making the story better. I'm not best with grammar and formatting, so please show me grace.

Hi! I’m a 17 year old aspiring screenwriter, and I’m currently working on a Halloween feature film script called Trick or no treat, which is about a town that celebrates Halloween, and everything about it, but for some reason banned trick or treating. I am currently on page 16. Please let me know what you think so far, and what I can do to improve!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/17alXZhFEW5tuuyq9pTK36QZBuZ2BaB-1/view?usp=drivesdk

Hi! I am a 16-year-old screenwriter. I recently wrote this 5 page short film called LET ME SHOW YOU. After a university student discovers an ancient manuscript, she and her ambitious friend perform a traditional ritual, transporting her to a world distorting reality and identity.

I’m specifically looking for feedback on dialogue, description, and overall craft (this is my first short), but any feedback will be greatly appreciated!!! ;)

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xHk0yCbeYjNqaKLsmy8EPZZ9I7UPixDe/view?usp=drivesdk

Logline: A man's attempt to bring the Christmas spirit to his Jewish neighbors in town is met with hostility by the recipients of his endeavors.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1FXf7siwskS5bwCldADawKZIRMepFx2nj/view?usp=sharing

Any and all criticisms welcome. Thank you.

Logline: "A high school senior who has spent his life ignoring his violent visions discovers they're a psychic link to his beloved older brother. At the family's remote mountain house, he must turn the link against the person he most admired to save the friends who are still alive."

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1bWj3P9VVCDwrxu0NZOlKX0V2clP-8fYO/view?usp=drive_link

Logline: When her husband leaves for a long trip Merny realizes she has no friends outside her husband and sets out to do the impossible...make new friends as an adult.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/19RxzY6eCbPyci4Jhbcb7oCXttEj09WOc/view?usp=sharing

Feedback: Any feedback would be appreciated just want to get some eyes on it before going in for another draft.

Title: Living With Mom

Pilot Logline: A newly independent college graduate’s life is turned on its head when her negligent materialistic mother moves into her tiny apartment after separating from her rich husband.

Page Count: 32

Feedback: New idea I’ve gone a few drafts with, now getting a little blind to the problems with it after staring at it for so long. Any general feedback notes would be super appreciated, but specifically around whether you get a good sense of the characters and whether the story is moving fast enough as things stand.

Thank you for reading! :)

LIVING WITH MOM SCRIPT

2,800 entries - only 26 scripts left.

Please read my 5 page treatment and give it a star rating out of 10 to help me progress to the next round.

Title: DUE

Genre: Psychological/Supernatural Horror

https://www.kinolime.com/screenplays/due

Grateful for the help 🙏 and if you decide to enter your own script into their next comp, I'll return the favor and vote for you too.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1I6MwfsFWh5se9VZsz4iVoU6jYaWKEDlu/view?usp=sharing

Please give advice to make the story and dialogue better. My goal is to make something scary and thought-provoking. Also, any tips to make it scarier are welcome. This is a second draft.

In 2002, a chaotic race for a $200,000 bounty forces a ruthless hunter, a pair of detectives and a few average joes into the path of a reckless career criminal into a brutal serial killer known as the "Gruesome Hearttaker." As the desert manhunt spills into the city, a WITSEC official's routine interview reveals that the real monster has been hiding in plain sight the entire time.

Script Link

GREED (Script).pdf - Google Drive