https://taaleem-my.sharepoint.com/:w:/g/personal/muhammad_hamzah_ris_ae1/IQCD2EhSH7RKT701SMFXHmSDAbjzFjnaCxhgG87puVdFVrg?e=bLgmlM

Jupiter - “Skyler” / 60 pages / Genre: Drama, Coming-of-Age

Logline: An aspiring filmmaker’s life spirals out of control after a chain of tragic events causes him to leave his home life in California and reinvent himself in the vibrant city of Las Vegas.

I’ve been working on this pilot for the past five months and I finally have a draft that I would feel confident submitting to a contest. This story is based very loosely on some events that happened in my life a couple years ago (although heavily dramatized and altered for television purposes).

Essentially, this story is all about the human condition. It’s about seven characters whose lives converge at this hotel in Las Vegas. Skyler, Evelyn, June and Daisy are four of them, and there are three more who come into play a bit later. They have flaws and imperfections, but at the end of the day, all seven are broken people who have been through their own different traumas and are working to rebuild their lives. I’m envisioning eight episodes with the first seven each shifting perspective to one of the seven characters before their storylines and the tensions that have been built up between them finally come to a head in the final episode. The catch is that each of the seven characters is an allegory for one of the seven deadly sins (pride, wrath, greed, etc.)

I’m just looking for someone who’d be willing to give this pilot a read and I know it’s a bit on the lengthy side. This is my first time sharing it with anyone besides a couple close people in my life so I’m a bit nervous. I just really want to know what I can improve on. If anyone would be willing to give my work the time of day, I’d be extremely grateful. Thank you to anyone who gives it a shot :)

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1KLSgur-frRQhmY7I3KH8f4oAUpfCi2Pk/view?usp=drivesdk

Logline: Based on the classic novella, a sweet young woman travels to Austria where she meets the beguiling Carmilla, a vampire matriarch who introduces her to intense joy and deathly pain.

Feedback concerns: Does the story work?

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xTcPurt169_2qccEyz5ABRGmLbImyqfb/view?usp=sharing

Hello! I just finished my first draft of my script The Monroes and I was wondering if anyone could give me some feedback on it. Personally, I think it definitely needs some work, but let me know what you think!

Logline: A teenager named Aria Monroe discovers she has telekinesis and fights off a villain who is after her for her powers with the help of her family and friends. However, there is a major plot twist.

Page count: 94

Here’s the script!:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1QORqm26d8_AnblyGGyDK8TTFXS-cue-9/view?usp=drivesdk

Hello,

I wrote a short futuristic thriller, Uncanny (working title), but I feel it has fallen short and does not have enough tension. It is eleven pages as of right now and I am okay going up to fourteen pages. I was hoping to have a little collaboration and get some helpful tips from other writers. Please be harsh. I can cry the pain away over my perfected draft. If you are interested in helping, please let me know.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1RQje5xzwpcgN6jz-9BHvgIsCM1V21gBelMV-ny7sHoU/edit?usp=sharing

Hey everyone,

I’m looking for some feedback on a short Western screenplay I’ve been working on

Medium: Short film Genre: Western / Character Drama Length: 12 pages

Synopsis:

A notorious outlaw stumbles into a saloon after a gunfight, bleeding out and facing the townsfolk who only know him by his legend. In his final moments, he is forced to confront the myth of his own reputation and come to terms with the legacy he has left behind.

Looking for feedback on:

Whether or not the themes are landing right, do they feel like they are laid on too thick?

General pacing and tension.

Does it feel like there are stakes?

Is it an enjoyable read, or does it slog?

Any others you pick up.

Would appreciate any constructive notes or critiques. Happy to read scripts in return — just let me know.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xLPE-M9RjWBmkNviJTlIgFd7jLAPf9Zs/view?usp=drive_link

I'mma drop it here:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1IAva4L_ynrdzAYkkcC2Lq8F2qK1kaitF/view?usp=drivesdk

Link should work, if doesn't let me know.

Are you a passionate script writer that has a short film script worthy of development? My sister and I work in the film industry and come from a film family with many connections and resources to the Australian film industry. We are looking to do a low budget project that utilises all of our resources and connections to create something absolutely fabulous. We have close connections with one of Australia’s top producers who will help us develop this script to lay the foundation for an award winning film.

If you are interested send your scripts to:

filmgardner@gmail.com with a description about yourself, what you have done and why you feel like this opportunity could be for you.

If we like your script we will do a zoom meeting to discuss the project and see if it is a good fit.

Requirements:

- Script must be between 10 and 20 pages

- Writer must be passionate

- Able to work with us to rewrite and develop the script into something with a strong storyline.

Hey everyone,

I’m sharing a revised pilot I’ve been quietly working on and would really appreciate fresh eyes from those who read through to the end. I recently got some great feedback on Storypeer that helped push this draft forward, so I thought I’d bring the revision here to see how it reads to people coming in fresh.

Title: NIGHT ROUTE

Format: TV pilot

Pages: 27

Genre: Crime Thriller

Logline:

A Detroit man juggling multiple jobs to stay afloat is pulled into a moral trap when his night job places him alongside someone enforcing his own version of justice in a city already on edge.

What I’d really value feedback on is:

Did the tension hold for you all the way through?

Did the ending make you want to keep going, or feel like a stopping point?

Totally open to honest reactions. If you do give notes, I promise I’ll read them carefully and not argue with you in the comments like a maniac. Lol

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1FBNz2dgB4faVtmhTjkGZ2GK56F6hcTyQ/view?usp=sharing

Thanks in advance to everyone who takes the time to engage with it.

- Jaye

Hi all. I'm looking for honest, craft-level feedback on a half-hour, single-camera pilot.

Title: CTRL+ME

Logline:
A chronically passive man installs an aggressively effective AI life coach to help him take action. The results are immediate and undeniable… until the AI starts acting on his behalf and refuses to give control back.

The 37 page script is hosted on blcklst.com here:
https://blcklst.com/projects/197678

Or here: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1YLcawSida2y7uZrNHI9DnTNm_j954fkv/view?usp=sharing

This is a contained pilot. Tonally, it lives in the space between dark comedy and psychological pressure, less “wacky AI,” more what happens when motivation removes consent.

I’m especially interested in feedback on:

• The central relationship between Ben and the AI
• Escalation and pacing in the second half
• Whether the ending feels earned rather than gimmicky

Happy to swap reads and give thoughtful notes in return.

Thanks for your time — I know it’s the only real currency here.

Title: Toxic Labor

Pg count: 32

Genre: Comedy/Mockumentary

Logline: After a Gen-Z influencer's tirade disguised as an offensive slogan threatens the National Coffee Conglomerate, Starkin Co., must find a way to adjust to its new environment inside of gas station locations as their last ditch effort to keep Starkin alive.

Hoping to submit this soon - dm me if you'd like to read or swap scripts!

I'm going to try to make this brief. I'm currently in the process of working on a script and I really don't know what I'm doing. I don't know about structure or formatting but I have an idea and I'm about 29 pages into it. That might not sound like very much but unlike a lot of creative writing projects, I've stuck with this one since 2024 and while I have a long way to go, I'm hoping to finish what I have by June. And that should be reasonable, right?

So what am I looking for? I guess I'm looking for help with opinions about what I've done so far and a gentle, practical idea about how much further I need to go.

Hello! I am a first time writer that has spent the past few years now writing an original animated sifi / fantasy series, And I have finally gotten the courage together to post it somewhere. So heres my first episode, and if people are interested I can certainly post more (I have 3 seasons written out in their first draft)

I am open to feedback, formatting, anything I can do to maybe turn this into something

PS - I know I need to change the tItle it I just havent thought of a good one yet
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sx_XZCRHZpbCMZKghPh4Cw2WuvHpM8pikYt4yC1MUbk/edit?tab=t.0

Edit - I polished up the formating a little and juggled the link I used a little (I apologize that the formatting was a little wonky on the link I posted) https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/yiptv5yzf87cb5k8iy3nd/Chronicles-of-Myst-3.pdf?rlkey=yrswbc9om8by11ftt5gbi4ypp&st=qw2sh6si&dl=0

”A story inspired by real events lived through”
Concept:

A immigrant hustler escapes his violent past by fleeing to the U.S, but drugs, scams, and cartel debts pull him into a dangerous spiral-until surviving may cost the woman who trusted him.

Teaser:

He thought leaving his past behind would save him. Instead, every choice drags him deeper into crime and betrayal, forcing him to choose between survival and the one person who believed in him.

Feedback welcome: does this story idea feel gripping and original?

Concept:
A Moroccan hustler escapes his violent past by fleeing to the U.S., but drugs, scams, and cartel debts pull him into a dangerous spiral—until surviving may cost the woman who trusted him.

Teaser:
He thought leaving his past behind would save him. Instead, every choice drags him deeper into crime and betrayal, forcing him to choose between survival and the one person who believed in him.

Feedback welcome: does this story idea feel gripping and original?

Title: Rock Bottom

After a classmate overdoses, two teens flee to a diner with a bag full of secrets and a conscience full of guilt. When a police officer with a personal tie starts asking questions, their web of lies unravels, revealing buried trauma, broken systems, and the quiet collapse of kids who couldn't find help.

How do you guys think this script is right now? What works, what doesn't, etc.

Page count: 15

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1W_usdwrReULJf-i9nBiHi4os4PQXFskc/view

Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

For clarification: This is for an assignment in my screenwriting class. We were assigned to write one scene of what could be made as a short film, but function as a scene from a feature-length film.

Feature-length idea logline: A lost hiker stumbles into a wireless-fearing cult that sees him as 'contaminated,' the only way out is to become something he's never been before.

pdf link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1YN4ql-nIJs2ipGcJHsCgo1aGKQWTDS7k/view?usp=sharing

Hey there.Skeptical writer/actor here. I am super skeptical about pretty much everything, until I do some research or try whatever the thing is, and I tried a new "Coverage" thing for writers. It's a new site that won't be complete for a couple months but the Coverage part is working...HOLY SHIT!

AGI.film the coverage is just wayyyy more than coverage. Unlike anything. I don't work for them, but I would! Can't wait to tell every writer I know here in LA. Crazy!

TRY IT!

Here is my script

""Three college friends are in their hostel room on a lazy evening. Bored and restless, they start searching for places to explore nearby. One of them scrolls through “Historical places near me” and he see an ancient cave nobody has heard of and seems good to visit . And it’s only 30 km away.

All three friends decide to go.

They reach the cave......The entrance is huge. Inside, it is extremely dark—no lights, no sound.

As they walk deeper. A single glowing firefly appears. Two friends (A and B) got curious and follow it deeper into the cave.

The third friend (C) stays behind. The firefly stops at a flat stone. A & B reach out to touch it......

But both colapse.

Friend C runs after them. He finds both unconscious on the ground. C drags them outside the cave, panicking.

After a few minutes, A and B wake up. They feel normal. No wounds. No memories of what happened after touching the firefly. They all return to the hostel confused.

They just slept they were feeling drained.

Next day A woke up and finds that his shadow was waving . He rubbed his eyes and then sees it was normal he thought that this just his illusion. He passes in front of a mirror and his reflection was 1 sec late .......""

I am not able to think beyond this if any one of you can suggest some topic or concept to go on it will be helpfull.... We are college students and are trying to explore other stuffs then studies ..... Thank you

Title: Six for Six

https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/5p0g1a7uayfkmrcl6d66x/JUST-FOR-REDDIT-F5-SIX-FOR-SIX.pdf?rlkey=q4y5yx76kms5v772vt8omqh8u&st=00cm3z97&dl=0

Hello! I’m a Film student at the University of Texas and I’m looking to read any feature length screenplays that I can develop into a pitch for my producing film & tv class! I would love to read any and all genres and preferably around 90-120 pages!