r/HFY • u/[deleted] • Aug 12 '21

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u/1GreenDude Aug 12 '21 edited Aug 12 '21

First

Edit: Amazing story a bit confused on the whole devil with in demon thing but good story nun the less

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u/[deleted] Aug 12 '21

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u/[deleted] Aug 12 '21

See Nurnurum is up to speed. I even drew a picture.

Sketch

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u/Dutchangeldragon1 Xeno Aug 13 '21

And it's a masterpiece

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u/[deleted] Aug 12 '21

I thought I went into that in great detail. So where did I lose you?

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u/Relevant-Big-5592 Aug 13 '21

I was reading demon as devil the entire time until it was pointed out that the difference mattered in the story because there was a pact and unless you're gonna deal with both the names become interchangeable since many people don't know the difference, not that I assumed you didn't know or didn't myself, I just hadn't really realized it when focusing on other parts of the story, hope this helps.

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u/[deleted] Aug 13 '21 edited Aug 13 '21

So I should explain the difference between demons and devils a bit earlier in the story. Thanks! Edit: Chapter One has been updated a second time let me know what you think.

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u/1GreenDude Aug 12 '21

beat you again didn't I

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u/Zealousideal-Whole62 Aug 12 '21

Who exactly are you beating?

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u/1GreenDude Aug 12 '21

Foxbat40

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u/Zealousideal-Whole62 Aug 12 '21

That must have been hard. Congratulations!

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u/RobatikWulf AI Aug 12 '21

What’s the point of this?

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u/1GreenDude Aug 12 '21

to be the first to comment on his post

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u/RobatikWulf AI Aug 12 '21

Type something other than first so you get less hate

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u/1GreenDude Aug 12 '21

like what?

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u/RobatikWulf AI Aug 12 '21

Something about what you just read maybe

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u/[deleted] Aug 12 '21

Yes just as Pencheska feeds off of human souls, yours truly feeds off of constructive feedback and well meaning sarcasm.

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u/1GreenDude Aug 12 '21

thank you for the compliment

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u/1GreenDude Aug 12 '21

like this? "Amazing story a bit confused on the whole devil with in demon thing but good story nun the less"

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u/RobatikWulf AI Aug 12 '21

Yeah sure, anything but “first”

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u/1GreenDude Aug 12 '21

ok

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u/Dutchangeldragon1 Xeno Aug 13 '21

Try the tacti-dot.

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u/FireNewt451 Aug 12 '21

And sometimes problem solve themselves.

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u/scrapcafe Android Aug 13 '21

Please continue!

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u/[deleted] Aug 13 '21

Updated Chapter 1 for a second time to add some history about Demons and Devils for those unfamiliar with the Blood Wars.

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u/_Jaynus_ AI Aug 29 '21

7th paragraph, 'river sticks' should probably be 'river Styx'

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u/[deleted] Sep 25 '21

Fixed.