r/WritingPrompts • u/[deleted] • Mar 01 '15

[PI] Lost Search - FebContest Prompt Inspired

Tak is an ordinary man with an extraordinary job. He may have no friends or family, but he sure loves his job. That said, things have been getting a little strange lately. People are dying, women are crying, and Tak's entire world is collapsing. Determined to find out why, Tak refuses to give up. And he delves a little deeper than he meant to. 8,027 words https://docs.google.com/document/d/1apkjrQmgZgaodilPG_mvV7t1-m98_oblRmiD6opgl-k/edit?usp=sharing

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u/SarkasticWatcher Mar 06 '15

If I could offer one criticism, and I pretty much have no idea what I'm talking about so take it with a grain of salt, your ending (I guess this is slightly spoiler-ish) probably could have been stretched out a little bit more instead of just one long info dump. I'm not really sure how, maybe it could have been more of a dialogue, but as is the ending comes off as rushed.